it's words like
forever, never, sorry, forgive me
that have stopped progress on my heart receiving future transactions
and i've learned that love isn't a constellation that's held in the sky by
angels who wish for these things to happen to tragedies like me. and
i know that happiness isn't built on me screaming how idiotic i was to
let myself fall into the trap of hope again.
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it's the first time you feel yourself at your breaking point. it's holding
your breath underwater for so long that you feel like you're going to
slip away. its saying i love you first and leaving words unsaid because
you know moments like that can be broken by breathing wrong. it's
the first time your heartbreaks. it's the first time you aoplogize knowing
it's not your fault, but you can't take falling asleep angry because you
know it's not worth it.
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i am
confusion wrapped in skin, with questions that are constantly
going unanswered. it's me writing and erasing and rewriting because
i aim to please others and i am constantly being reminded of what i
used to be. it's me constantly making paper chains, and writing letters
that will remain unsent, it's me creating catastrophe when i close my
eyes and wake up only to realize that i live in perfection. it's constantly
reminding myself that everyone is watching you, every breath you take
every time you shed your lies and pass them off to someone who didn't
give a damn in the beginning.
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it's moments like this,
when it feels like i've gain the ability to slow everything down
and i do nothing but count how many times my pulse beats and
how long my body becomes silent between snare drum beats i
feel stripped of all reality.
it's moments like this where all i want to do is run...
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this was fucking brilliant.
and this is completely off but, i love your name, edit my world.
back to the poem,
the entire piece is just staggering.
'i am confusion wrapped in skin'
that's a lovely line.
i honestly loved the entire thing.
you gave plenty of details for every single paragraph.
i can't even begin to describe how i feel about each individual paragraph.
wow.
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this is amazing
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this is brilliant. really brilliant.
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Absolutely amazing. So emotional and gripping. I love how you describe the angels and constellation. Greatjob on a heart wrending write
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absolutely, brillant amazing, exquiste, lovely... This write was amazing. I believe you can realte with a lot or people through this peom. I usually do not like poems in the paragraph style but this runs nice...no nice is not the word... very fluid like water in a stream falling of the side of a mountain into a giant trinkling waterfall... my favorite part even though u have heard so many times before would have to be this part...
it's the first time you feel yourself at your breaking point. it's holding
your breath underwater for so long that you feel like you're going to
slip away. its saying i love you first and leaving words unsaid because
you know moments like that can be broken by breathing wrong. it's
the first time your heartbreaks. it's the first time you aoplogize knowing
it's not your fault, but you can't take falling asleep angry because you
know it's not worth it.
and of course the last part which in my mind explains how you were when wrote this....
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Run oh yes know that feeling well just hide away somewhere until whatever bothers me ends. Wish life could be that easy always something pulls you out of your place and says "come on things to do". I hope whatever it is eases and you find strength to move on and next time a happy write will flow from quill
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'it's the first time you feel yourself at your breaking point'
'its saying i love you first and leaving words unsaid because
you know moments like that can be broken by breathing wrong.'
that just leaves me breathing slowly trying to memorise the way you wrote that so perfectly.
this is so so beautiful. (:
♥
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this is absolutely amazing. i especially loved..
"it's the first time you feel yourself at your breaking point. it's holding
your breath underwater for so long that you feel like you're going to
slip away. its saying i love you first and leaving words unsaid because
you know moments like that can be broken by breathing wrong. it's
the first time your heartbreaks. it's the first time you aoplogize knowing
it's not your fault, but you can't take falling asleep angry because you
know it's not worth it. "
all of that. well the whole thing is beautiful and i can relate to a lot. especially the part that i pointed out. and the ending. this is a wonderful piece.
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it's moments like this, when it feels like i've gain the ability to slow everything down and i do nothing but count how many times my pulse beats and how long my body becomes silent between snare drum beats i feel stripped of all reality. it's moments like this where all i want to do is run...
yes, yes i did do what you think i did. :3
anyways. this is absolutely amazing. and just that last paragraph was absolutely mind-blowing.done in hours, days, whatever. this is still amazing. ^.^ -
This is beautiful.
under water
- This should be one word.
Are you still working on this? Let me know when its done!
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it's finished
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It's amazing.
♥
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D:
omnomnom.
TELL ME WHEN ITS FINISHED, yes? ;D
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yes... i might change the title... or something >_< i'm stuck though
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i like(d) the title.
itll come to you.
dont force it though.
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it's done...
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