A tree of stars
that shines with the light
Of a hundred thousand souls. Each opaque leaf
to it's branch holds tight, straining to fill in the holes.
One touches another as the wind sifts through, and then all the brighter
they shine. They sing with the breeze a melody sweet and true
of life, of the pure, and divine. It's branches never wither
and it's bark never peels, stands tall a silver soldier in the dark.
Even those fallen few on the ground at it's heels it does guard as they
shiver and spark. For those lying still were the first of them all, and
give the tree life even now. Seeping in at the roots,
moving up at a crawl, spreading out through each leaf and bough.
Unearthly but natural
supple and sturdy,
this tree filled with
hope and with light.
simple in form
an unending beauty,
Rising up to illumine our night.
Author notes
Thanx for the mind exercise!!!
Written April 18th, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- Two Hour Contest #3 by Samplette.
300 points, ended April 18, 2004, 13 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Sacred Chants & Hymns Of Praise by Mercury Rising.
1000 points, ended August 17, 2007, 18 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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Your imagery, use of a tree, and overall message in this poem really spoke to me. And a nice use of form as well!
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A wonderful conctete poem that was a real pleasure to read. You obviously put a lot of work into this excellent piece. Best ofluck in my contest, and thanks for entering.
David
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Another wonderful entry to the contest! Thanks for sharing and best wishes!
Frogz` -
Thank you for sharing in our contest with us,
this poem has a very nice feel held within the words.
Love and Light
Frozentearz -
I can tell you spent a lot of time on this poem, and I really like it. I love the shape, and the rhyme scheme is amazing. You barely know it is there because it is so subtle and unforced. Excellent job, Annandhel.
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This is incredible. The words, the imagery, the form, the expression. Truly I a bow before this tree and admire the majesty you have created! Beautifully and epiclly composed. A mighty oak of a poem.
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beautifully written, a poem of such beauty and peace. a much deserved win Terrific! congratulations.
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Oh what a delight to read. I love how you gave this tree to all who have the pleasure to read your poem. I feel connected to you by this "tree". Absolutely wonderful. CONGRATULATIONS ON THE GOLD!!!
Renee
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This definitely was a very beautiful poem about this tree. You brought some very wonderful aspects of the tree using the entire picture. Congratulations on your Gold! This was a wonderful entry.
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I wasn't really like the form until I noticed that it is a tree, and now, it's okay. I just don't pertain to like skipping of lines (and yes I do have poems that are like that, but, that doesn't mean I like those either just in some pieces they are warranted) too much.
When you say 'It's' I feel that it is 'Its' instead. I may be wrong, and probably am, but, I think it's 'Its' and not 'It's' even in reference to the tree.
Anyways..
A good piece that you have written here, and I hope that my comment has been forthcoming.
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This is a worthy winner indeed!
Everything about this is brilliant and I especially love the shape!
CONGRATULATIONS & VERY WELL DONE!
~ Louise -
Perfection at its best!
Congrats on getting the gold! It was well deserving. You did a wonderful job with this one. I love the shape of it. Very unique. Keep it up and never stop writing.
May the colours of the rainbow follow you always.
Smiles always,
Kristina
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A beautifully written concrete poem. Excellent description of life. It gives a feeling of serenity...and peace. Only if huh??
You did a great job with this.
Thank you for entering.
Sam
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It's a description of what I saw when I looked at the picture. The stars on the tree are human souls and I was describing the life of the tree and trying to get the reader to imagine humans living their lives that way. Mimicking nature and finding peace and unity. The way I wish the world was actually, that we could be happy giving to others and being part of a beautiful whole and that whole also protecting us throughout our lives. If that makes sense to you? I don't explain it very well but thats the gist.
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Strangely Complicated
Aww. How romantic. But what of the tree of stars? Is it a dream of our imagination, and is that our pleasure? Sorry for taking a hedonistic tone, but what is the end of this poem, speaking in human function? Are you forcing the reader to think, or merely imagine? It's so dreamy that it begs to be interpreted, but then when closely read, seems to be arbitrary description. Good language, but what is the focus? Is it merely the light projected through hope and faith? Sounds very Kiekegaardian if so. -
Ah.. this makes me feel peaceful. You will definately place with this one.. beautiful and mysterious, and it could have many different meanings than the obvious. Nice job.
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I too love shape poetry. Your writing seems softer, more naturalistic. Keep up the good work.
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simply ... beautiful x
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This is a really great piece. Your use of descriptives is admirable. I am extremely impressed, write on.
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I absolutely adore how you formatted this poem. I haven't seen shape poetry in a long long time. The actual poem itself was also amazingly-written and with wonderful descriptions. I liked how you described the wind as sifting through. Wonderful write and a enjoyable read.
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This is awesome, you have written a beautifuly descriptive poem. I really love the last part, you have said all that i wanted to say when i saw this picture but i didn't have the ability that you have to put it into words
Good luck in the contest... simply beautiful
Blessings and Smiles
~LadyStarlight~
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