touching you, drifting my fingertips
light as a ghost's whisper
and you can't feel it, for the water
from beneath your burned bridges
has numbed you
in the words of a great man,
beauty walks a razor's edge...
someday it might be yours,
if you decide, you want to take
me... this is an eternity of waiting...
and i, i can't
escape from you,
your long reaching loving,
and i don't want to
go,
i don't want to lose it, what we've forged
in fires of fear and caution,
faith,
hope and prayers of love,
the sweetest sound to grace God's ear
are we stuck, or are we stopped?
From my heart to your eyes
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this has a wonderful emotion in the raw feeling to it an excellent write dear poet
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Thank you my friend =]
-K
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Wow, this is beautiful.
drifting my fingertips
- A very soft and touching image.
Though I found the ellipses detracted to some extent from the presentation. Perhaps try using three periods instead of four or five?
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Thank you, I will fix it- I usually just pound that poor key
It's a bad habit I really should fix. Thanks for reading and commenting!
-K
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excellent!
some great lines in this my friend; "touching you, drifting my fingertips
light as a ghost's whisper" is so cool, and the ending lines: "are we stuck, or are we stopped?" really pulls this together with a power that makes you really think..
great write lady!
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Thanks sweetheart! =]
-K
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Excellent!
Lovely look at the feeling of Nirvana between two
there is so much bliss, yet, often a feeling of miss as well
"are we stuck, or are we stopped?"
Very clever ending...Write On!,,
sss David 
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Thank you hon =] I always love your comments, they give me a new perspective on my work! Hugs!
-K
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Wonderful question.... wonderful build up to it too. Feel the emotion. Good job my niece good job
Uncle
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Thank you Unc =] *huggles*
-K
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