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Again..

A force so powerful-
you could call it love
with the rush of the ocean
the currents pulling me apart-
waves crashing over my exposed heart
drenching me in bitter cold reality
life was too precious to miss til now-
I need to catch my breath before I drown-
opening my eyes as I go under again
seeing a hand out stretched toward
Father Poseidon in all his glory
my unworthy being shattering at his touch
savior again-
my savior
again..-

Awaking in the arms of the Pan
it's him
it was him again-
my savior..-

We laugh and dance all day whilst he plays his flute
as Sea Nymph and Satyr welcome home-
drunk with bliss a sight you couldn't miss
but as sunsets
the sea calls me again-
I must leave....
I must leave again-

Author notes

Okay... well it's kind of a song I just popped out my skull.. So just.. yeah. No real need for critiques. Just something that I've been humming..... MINE

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Comments


  • xxuglyducklingxx
    November 26, 2009

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    >.>!!!!

    This makes for a pretty wicked song. It's a beautiful write. Full of passion and very mystical. Brava.


  • Dark-Ecanus27
    November 22, 2009

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    no critique eh...well...CRYTIQUE CRITIQUE CRITIQUE!!! haha take that! lol sorry XD. love this hun. beautiful and passionate. -nuzzles you- my little nymph