By grand gestures you never knew heart could harness
Confide to me the missing slivers of the moon
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this is an interesting piece.. short.. but some good words.. I am wondering about the line on grand gestures,
would it sound better if you added what? As in...
'By grand gestures you never knew (what) heart could harness'.. Interesting last line.. causing contemplation.. -
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Thanks.
Naww. That would change the meaning too much. But I might say "By grand gestures you never noticed heart could harness"
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ohhhh...ahhh...nice lines
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So much is said in so few words. I love short pieces that actually convey meaning, through it is hard to write long comments about them. Great job.
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this is teasing me to read and read again.
it's saying a lot with two lines.
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I am thinking it might be too long. Just kidding.
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