5.
Static
Power
Excitement
Change
The feelings flying around
As the clock clicks down.
4.
Happiness
Temptation
Romance
Sensuality
Its getting closer
We're gonna start over.
3.
Jittery
Strained
Scared
Nervous
SO close I can taste it
its counting down so slow.
2.
Promises
Prize
Pain
Strain
a few more minutes
And the time will come
1.
Boom the clock ticks 12
Happy Millennium!
Author notes
Dunno.. cant sleep.. crap I know lOl
A contest entry
- Title prompts( ready set go ) by Nakatrea.
950 points, ended December 3, 2009, 23 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What do you think? Is it really as bad as I think?
Comments
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Its not crap
Its just lacking a bit of depth I suppose
You have a great idea and I really just think tht you should go with it.
Make each little section longer.
Its truly a great take on the prompt
I thought it was going elsewhere
but You did a great job.
Thanks for entering -
No, this was really good.I think its really impressive when someone can put something across in lines of one word and you did this well.The ending took me by surprise too.Montey
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I was five for the millennium! LOL
I dont think its good, but hey, shows you what I know LOL
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