So once upon a time,
‘Bout neverwhen ago,
In neverland by neverwhere where neverrivers flo,
Where neverword is rhyme,
Kids neverever gro,
And neverday joins nevernight in neverending glo,
There lived a little girl,
Who loved a little boy,
He promised her a pearl,
She promised him a toy.
The years have passed,
So many years,
And years, and years, and more,
The girl has stayed in neverland,
The boy has gone ashore.
And night is day,
And day is night,
And night is chasing day,
The girl has stayed in neverland,
The boy has gone away.
And weeds have grown
In flower beds,
And weeds and weeds galore,
The girl has stayed in neverland,
The boy is here no more.
Dear gentle boy,
In worlds so wide,
In worlds and worlds so rich,
Away you’re gone,
So out of word,
So out of missive reach,
Dear gentle boy,
Away so far,
This frightened little girl,
Awaits, awaits,
Awaits, awaits,
Your silver little pearl,
Dear gentle boy,
My braids are long,
And long and long my wait,
And in my hand
I hold the toy,
The promise long of date.
The years have passed,
So many years,
And years and years and more,
Please blow a bubble
Ball of soap,
And send it to my shore,
And night is day,
And day is night,
And night is closing day,
And fill it with
Your rainbow’s kiss,
And send it here away,
And weeds have grown
In flower beds,
And weeds and weeds galore,
You took my heart,
Two hearts you have,
I have a heart no more.
So once upon a time,
‘Bout neverwhen ago,
In neverland by neverwhere where neverrivers flo,
Where neverword is rhyme,
Kids neverever gro,
And neverday joins nevernight in neverending glo,
A man no longer boy,
Returns to find a girl,
He reaches for the toy,
She reaches for the pearl,
And with a final sigh,
His grizzly head asleep,
Forever in her lap,
The toy in mighty grip.
Oh tender boy, dear sir,
Forever you are gone,
The pearl me you grant
To hold it here alone,
And grow into the world,
You gave me life and power,
Dear sir, you are the seed,
And I, the pretty flower.
Author notes
GOLD - "two different kind of choices" by Allison1212
no, no typo's there, all you see is purely intentional... 
Written April 18th, 2004
A contest entry
- two different kind of choices by Allison1212.
300 points, ended April 27, 2004, 9 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Can You Write like Service, Kipling or Noyes by ecrivain01.
1900 points, ended December 22, 2007, 10 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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Oh my...I read most of your poetry but this one bring shivers down my spine because of tension you put in it from the beginning. Congratulations for all well deserved trophies.
~Sonja~
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thank you my beautiful friend sonja for such beautiful words of appreciation
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This has breath-taking cadence, a gorgeous melancholy tone, and demonstrates a deep, penetrating understanding of the English language that reaches beyond the Thesaurus and below the dictionary. Words are toys, they are pearls- they are your music- and you manipulate the verbal song to create vivid sound along with vivid image. This is a wonderful piece of poetry.
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my friend, one of those famous... “you made my day”
, thank you.
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Looks like you made it ...
into the top three. Congrats. -
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thank you
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A Masterpiece -- OUTSTANDING
This made me cry simply because it is so beautiful.
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hey, this comment made ME cry , thank you my friend
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Wow, so simple and so soulful.
I don't think its 'like' anything, for you have written something truly unique. Don't ever stop. -
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many thanks, larry
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This is interesting ...
but you have a tense problem. You start out in third person and switch to first. The third tense in the beginning should be changed to first, or the first to third so that you have one tense all the way through.
Otherwise, not bad.
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I see that could be what you intended ...
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thank you for your valuable comment. the mix is due to the mix of "narrator" and "hero" talking
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made my day and dressed it in happy smiles, thank you my dear friend, you are always welcome to my world. i promise you only the most beautiful of written dreams...
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marvelous/enchanting
you havent ceased to amaze me and leave me in total awe and silence. this was such a heartfelt mystical fairyland adventure to read! you have great views from the male and female point of view which is rare and uterly stellar. such a delight. i am left with a feeling of freeness and sunshine... marvelous! -
patrick, i am delighted to have found an appreciative audience in you, especially so long after "publishing" the poem here. really thankful for your reading and commenting.
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Stunning
This is one of the best peoms I have ever read. I love this so much. You are truly talented...if that word even does you justice. I just loved this poem so much. It's like a song almost, actually it could be one if recieted aloud. It's just awesome. You are awesome too *bows* I shall make it a goal to read much more of your works!! -
dearest allison, if this poem has helped wipe one single blue tear from your eye and replaced it with one single red smile instead, then you made me a happy man. i think it did it, so i am. if it happens every time you read it, i am. if whenever you are looking for an anchor out of depths you reach out and hang onto it and feel warmth seeping from it through your fingers straight into your heart, i am. this comment you wrote, is one of the most wonderful tributes my poetry ever got, it means not only the poem is nice, it means it touched you. it's our point of contact, i hope you soak from it all the power you need for all your tomorrows... yes, i read you last poems. you will smile, allison, eluding happiness is only one street corner away, all you need is a bit of patience. i am your friend, allison. y.
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Mimiagatha... i love you so much for writing this poem for me, i know i have already commented... but i try to read it as often as i can just to remind myself what this "pearl" has done to me. Thank you so very much for writing me such a beautiful poem.
love always,
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hey, Allison, you give me shivers here, got already some nice comments on my stuff, but this one... beats them all. glad you like it and who cares about cups and points anyway, it is about comments like this that it is all about. thanks a lot, YOU made MY day
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OH MY GOD! that was amazing. i am speachless. I LOVE how you used both choises to write this.. the ending is beautiful.. the whole friggin thing is beautiful. you have so much talent. thank you so much for writing this because it has completely made my day. You captured everything so well...
AWESOME!!!!
good luck in the contest!
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