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A Bit of Play

In his arms, he held her close and tight
She playfully pushed, then looked away
She touched her lips, as posing for play
His eyes said, I want you tonight

Her naughty moves roused his delight
Watching her efforts, feigning demure     
He took her pale hand, striving to lure
With helpless excite said, I want you tonight

Take me right here in bright daylight
She strolled close, with flawless detail
Tempted his heart, a carnal assail
I'll have you now, and I'll want you tonight

In his arms, he held her close and tight
His eyes said, I can't wait till tonight

Author notes

Prompt:
Lend me thy pen, to write a word in the moonlight.

Echo Sonnet:
The Echo Sonnet, created by Jeff Green, is similar to the kyrielle sonnet in that it consists of three quatrains and a heroic couplet. The last line of each quatrain (A2) and the second line of the couplet is the refrain line which can be a repeated whole line, phrase or end word. The first line of the first quatrain (A1) also repeats as the first line of the couplet. The form has a rhyme scheme and is preferably composed of lines of iambic pentameter.

Schematics:
Rhyme Scheme: A1bbA2 accA2 addA2 A1A2

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  • Masked Sonneteer
    November 29, 2009

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    The variants in the echo line give this piece a gentle sensuality, Combine that with the romantic imagery that you develop consistently from line to line you take you reader on a journey of love.

    Thank you for sharing in the challenge

    Z

  • SimplySonnets gold member
    November 24, 2009

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    A fine love poem, loved the repeats, reminds me of the "villanelle" form, whatever it is delightful, thank you.


  • UncleDunk gold member
    November 22, 2009

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    A lusty, tempting sonnet
    With passion burning bright
    He hints "Hey - hop up on it"
    She winks, "I think I might"

    Very nice.


  • Aelten
    November 21, 2009

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    This is a fun one! Nicely done.
    Best of luck in the contest,
    A~


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    November 21, 2009
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    Humm..this is lovely and just beautiful one..bringing the sentiments warm around and around ..wonderful work and thanks for sharing it my friend...


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    November 21, 2009

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    Humm..this is lovely and just beautiful one..bringing the sentiments warm around and around ..wonderful work and thanks for sharing it my friend...

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