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You say you want me,
You say need me.
But you're actions keep contradicting
The words you're saying.

Say you want me to be free,
Say you only have eyes for me.
But every time I turn around
You're leaving me.

And I'm tired of trying to hold ya
When you wanna go.
And that look in your eyes
It's killing me,
But you gotta know.

I won't beg
You to stay.
At least, I won't ask you to
Anyway.

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Song I'm working on. It's not finished. So don't mind this write please.

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  • Bigz7551
    December 3, 2009
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    Very powerful! Men and women can relate to this poem, I've had the same thoughts with many ex's.


  • Whenitefallz
    November 23, 2009
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    And I would play this tune & feel teary eyed & guilty.
    Wondermous!! <~{see how I made that word up? lol.}


  • Her hand in yours
    November 22, 2009

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    Emotional here and so true, full of bleeding, it really like feels like a song, a catchy one with a memorable chorus