these chains that bind me
keep me down
trapped
alone and afraid
no way out
no one to call
these chains
tear at my flesh
my wrists
get smaller and smaller
but the chains
keep getting
tighter and tighter
these chains
drag me to hell
pulling me
down
down
deeper and deeper
into the dark
cold ground
these chains
are torture
these chains
are hell
Author notes
Inanimate Objects: chains
In a list
A contest entry
- Pictures, Word Bank & More - Oh My! by Manda Kathryn.
800 points, ended November 22, 2009, 18 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Prose Prewrites. by Antebellum.
400 points, ended December 9, 2009, 66 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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This is really good.
Great take on the prompt you were given.
This is a wonderfully written piece, I like the way this is worded.
thanks for entering :] -
very moving piece which takes the reader to a dark place without choice or control over destiny. well written!
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This sure does sound like hell and I can relate to these feelings of being trapped and loneliness
it's horrid xx DD
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Wonderful
Very powerful write. And so very creative. congratulations on the honorable mention
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these chains
tear at my flesh
my wrists
get smaller and smaller
but the chains
keep getting
tighter and tighter
I like this.. Wow, never heard of a metaphor like that before.
These poems always interesting me, and you pulled this one off very well with nice imagery.
8/10
Thanks for entering -
Such fierce emotion in this piece. It really pulls in and pulls you down. Very vivid images and powerful words. Great write. Check me out sometime. Maybe "Walls." - cgirl0410
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Well done on your HM.We all have chains that bind but hopefully we have a key to unlock them called friends, Ros
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Thank You for Your Entry ~
I found this lyrical and re-read it singing it softly to myself and found each line growing more in depth and strong as I did
best of luck
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