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Sweet Dreams

Broken down reverie

haunting some distant memory

that contains our souls.

Not that they're caught

 

but that's what they want,

 

to exist in the place that was ours.

 

Dawdle there for pleasure's sake.

 

Sit on front porch swings

 

and watch fireflies dance

 

around the yard in some ceremonial trance.

 

It wasn't romance, if anything

 

there was innocence in the air

 

that we breathed in with laughter,

 

and so this is what it means

 

to wish sweet dreams...

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  • RaeBear
    November 26, 2009
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    i wish I could write like you.... of course, I haven't wrote in a year, beside the point, you could teach me a thing or two. loving it, especially when I'm reading Nicholas Sparks and in a romantic mood. love you , sis


  • RaeBear
    November 26, 2009

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    Pretty good

    Your relationship with D must be going steady, what with all the romance in the air, lovin it sis.


  • Stuart Higginson
    November 21, 2009

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    "Revery" -- "reverie"? I checked on US and UK, both came up with -ie.

    "Not that they're caught
    but that's what they want,
    to exist in the place that was ours.
    Dawdle there for pleasure's sake."     ...... this spoke well of the inner-need for belonging, which most souls are deemed to possess (irrespective of whether the ego claims different when one is without another). These lines also made me think of a John Donne poem, in which the two souls of he and his lover are dancing and mingling in the air over their heads as they are lain together. I enjoyed the detail you wove into the lines which ensued the above section.

     

    I enjoyed this piece, and the pondering at the end of the poem closed it well.


    • Kay Laon Anders
      November 21, 2009
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      Thanks Stuart!

      yeah I corrected the spelling thanks for that and your comment much appreciated.

      Kay


  • Satans Mistresses
    November 20, 2009
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    Very enjoyable

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