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the Accepted Love

Infinite whispers,tasting delicious beauty,
Emotions overwhelmed,innocent joy,
A sweet moment,between rhapsody and embrace,
Compare the flower,caressing within a picture,
Colours blending,towards a mutual love
Soaring,her soul dances with mine in pleasure
Blending like a boat on water,we seek the wind.

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  • ailill
    November 22, 2009

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    this has some good imagery in it.. if I was writing this, I would say 'compare the flowers, caressing with a picture'.. I think that is what you meant there and it was most likely just a typo... Other than editing out some of the typos.. I think this could become a gem..