Enticed by your eyes
Such beauty found within them
Love found there within
The beauty of your true self
Found within your sultry eyes.
Please tell me what you think
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Beautiful thoughts and sentiment. Nicely penned with such vivid discription.
Found within your sultry eyes.
Great work !
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Beautifully Sentimental & Heartfelt!!
You have wonderfully expressed what the meaning and depths of true love and beauty are - through the window of the soul - the eyes of a loved one. Great write, poet!! Keep your muse's quill flowing, always...
& 
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Cyn
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Short, sweet and to the point. I loved it.
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Great imagery! why so short though? maybe you should try to set it to a rhyme scheme? it makes me think of beauty and what a person's understanding of what beauty is, and that makes me like this poem. It s good! what is the reason for the title you chose though? Maybe you should start with I was or I am enticed by your eyes, then in the third line, maybe you could say Love is found within them or something more specific...then the last line could maybe read Is found within your sultry eyes. I like your use of the word sultry though. It emphasises a higher vocabulary, and makes the poem sound much better than if you had used another word.
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Most wonderfully beautiful, my dear friend
The eyes are truly the windows to ones' soul; you wrote this perfectly
Wishing you the very best of all there is,
Sandy
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