I embody the silky caress of the ghost
curling around your neck
like the smoke from a cigarette
You inhale me deep into each breath
silently knowing the harm that I bring
I embody the awakening shock of the frost
erotically I slide down your spine
leaving a trail of moisture and flames
I drip back into the tray
and you freeze me again in your mold
Like the moon I dance in orbit
mesmerized by the pull of your magnetism
circling around your heavenly body
but I embody the unquenchable desire of man
and one kiss will never be enough
Author notes
My word prompt for this was "embody" which is a great word full of countless potential. I really could have wrote 300 pages of this if I had more free time.
I hope you enjoy the read.
IxI
A contest entry
- basically anything, enter ! by i inhale purple.
400 points, ended November 25, 2009, 41 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - hey there; you, with the hair. by jessica rabbit..
400 points, ended December 17, 2009, 15 entries
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Comments
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but I embody the unquenchable desire of man
and one kiss will never be enough
The ending was my favorite part, because it makes me think and feel.
I did think the repetition was a little unneeded, but your point was clear. -
this is a very interesting piece,
i especially liked the first stanza when you mention ghost.
i'd have to say yes to this.
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i didnt like the repetitiveness of ' I embody '
i did think it was a good write, but im going to have to say no. -
wow. I am stunned by this. I never would have expected this sort of imagery and metaphor with a sensual write.
I have been staring at this piece for 5 minutes now, a bit unsure about what to say. I really feel that each stanza has something special to it, and I can understand each stanza's significance to the poem. I LOVE the ending, too. You left it just right. Excellent, freaking excellent poem.
yes; please wait for the other judge(s) to comment.
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whoa this was getting pretty sensual, but all in all in a likeable way? yes.
Hah, well i love the imagery to this, Excellent piece:] -
a wonderful write, very well penned...loved the imagery and subtle sensuality it has...
''I embody the silky caress of the ghost
curling around your neck
like the smoke from a cigarette''
I very much liked this part, it has a great vibe and words are very well chosen...
such a shame you didn't enter this in time in my contest, but I think this has a lot potential to be awarded in a many other contests...
take care
Suza
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I love this write sexual but it's not bluntly said. Good job!=)
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