Hatred through the torn land sweeps
while Isaac and Ishmael weep
as brother's slaughtered by brother
each bent on destroying the other
branches of father Abraham's tree
living up to Cain's dreaded legacy
in heaven an anguished Adam cries
as helplesly he watches his sons die
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Written April 17th, 2004
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This is actually written about the conflict between Palestine and Israel, the prophets mentioned here are those whom all the three Abrahamaic religions follow the prophets have been chosen very carefully..... they represent the common factor in the religions.
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War is the new first resort of the race of Man nowadays, isn't it? And if you think about it, personal vendettas, jealousy, anger, and shallow hatreds are what started the divisions of Man in the early Christian Bible, as well as overweaning arrogance and pride. You present a good message well, and in a very interesting way. What better example than a Biblestory?
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Hi Pari - Very well put - and of course totally correct.
As you have already seen, I have also written this theme on several occasions over the years – I tend to rewrite it whenever related matters like suicide bombers or rekindled wars are in the news again.
Sadly the world seems to be full of religious bigots that slant God’s work to suit their own hypercritical version of the scriptures – Judgment day will take a very long time and some horrendous punishments should be handed out for all the harm the religious spin-doctors and lobbyists have done over the centuries. Albert.
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Well done! Amen!
Excellent poem! You personalize war. For too many people, war is something happening far away and therefore not given much thought. We are all related..to kill anyone is like killing a family member.
Pray for Peace!
<3 Maureen
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I am not a bible expert, but I do know of the situation you speak of here... and I think.. we are reliving this.... when will it all stop, when will it start to make sense again?
Nicely done.
Criss -
excellent expression of the destuction and hopeless feeling of battle. well written
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THis is very good. A very nice write against war, even uses the bible on it. I loved, very inspiring in a depressing way as well as a good way.
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This is good. And that is where it begins no? With Isaac and Ishmael? And it has never really stopped. I like the tie in with Adam and Cain, it shows the univeriality of the loss.
another insightful write.
Susan -
It is rare that a person can find a write that sums up the wars so ... completely. It's amazing how your words can strike such emotions in the reader... very well written. Kudos. ciao
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Oh yes, I like this very much!
I often think that if there is a God he must be so disappointed in the human race, and outraged even at the things people dare to do in his name. But then what else can be expected, we are, literally, nothing more than animals.
Very well written, something that both believers and non-believers can relate to. Well done!
Kyla
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A very well expressed commentary on a contemporary situation. Sometimes, I feel that hatred generates its own momentum and carries people in it's flow. Much damage is done before sanity prevails. I liked the biblical references, too.
Krishna
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Extremely powerful poem! Brevity is not a synomym for having little to say; there is a world of emotion and thought behind this expression. These are the kind of writings that impress me. Thank you for creating and sharing. I look forward to read many more of these verbal expressions to follow (of which I am sure they are hiding in the future somewhere). Take care,
Rage -
I like this one very much. The sentiments are timeless. It does not matter what side of the fence you stand on when a loved one dies...because it is still "someone's" loss. It breaks my heart the way few things in this world do...you have left me saddened for all of us...
But these are words that need to be said, read and listened to...so it is not forgotten. Maybe someday...there will be peace.
Well done!
UB
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Gosh powerful words Pari. I read it quickly a while ago and came back to read it and comment now and it's changed I like this version, it flows well and your words have stopped me in my tracks...it makes me wonder why all the hatred and death. Thanks for sharing this..
Blessings and Smiles
~LadyStarlight~
Edited on Apr 17, 4:57 p.m. because 'typing gone to the dogs
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I think you also need a longer first line… ‘broken land sweeps’ for instance?
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I think it certainly scans better – but I would say you have over rhymed it now (if you can have such a thing) the close end rhymes with short lines makes it a bit ‘sing song’ for the serious topic… I think it might work better ABAB or ABCA i.e. swap lines two and three. You would have to change the second four though – you can’t just swap there.
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Very well writin showing what people think about war .. sometimes i feel we must but then other times i think ther pres just does it so that he looks good.. and i think people are starting to see that which is making him less popular.. Good Write Keep it UP
Todd -
It’s very well said… I always claim my self from Adam’s clan… so if Adam is everyone’s father, why this hatred and wars between brothers? I don’t think we follow what we preach… well done… thanx for sharing…
mina -
a well said piece at a time that seems this whole world is in
a war...
Tamara
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Yes – well said! All wars are both civil wars – and uncivilised. The scan seemed a little off I had to read it a couple of times to make it flow but it might be my early morning eyes, or the expectation from the first three lines, which I thought were going to rhyme. (weep sweeps) if you flipped the father around you could get a half rhyme with brother… or alter a weep or sweeps – anyway technicalities aside I very much like this one, and the meaning and sentiment!
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