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A Wall

a wall goes up,
I can't let anyone see,
see me for me.

I don't want them to be disappointed.
what if I'm not who they want me to be?

the wall is made too well.
it can't be taken apart over night.

I don't want to live like this anymore,
but I'm scared.

I'm scared of disappointment,
of heartbreak,
of everything.

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  • XRainbowliciousX
    November 18, 2009

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    The ending is great.

    I like the emotions you feel off the poem and how you can actually relate to it.
    One thing maybe to change is the bricks...Idk that was a little weird for me...I did like how you said you couldn't take it down though.

    NIce write.


  • Antipodi
    November 18, 2009

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    Wow this is a powerful statement dear poet and is very isolationary ..it has lots of potential ejoyed the read dear poet