Uncrossing legs,
exposing wet ache ~
he claims her...
~tantalizing licks,
insatiable appetite,
she gasps with pleasured
moans...
Author notes
Seventeen Words Of Something Sinfully Sensual
If you leave (clappies and comment) i will return the favor,
thank you
Rend
In a list
- Erotic Desires group list • next in list
A contest entry
- Seventeen Words Of Something Sinfully Sensual by DrkPoet.
750 points, ended November 21, 2009, 20 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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erotic
This poem really screams or 'moans' sensual! i love it when we can write about our most basic desires -
well id this were silver I suspect that gold is really warm...
...this has some heat, the sense of passion here is done well, I think this is how a good relationship might be, sometimes very steamy...lovely...PK
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Those licks will get me every time. Nice visuals too. Congratulations on winning the Silver trophy. I do agree this is a delicious read.
MJ
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Woo hoo!!!! This really is sinfully delicious dear. Congratulations on the silver trophy. You did a great job creating this piece.
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Hot
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'grats on the Silver darlin'
Now this ... this is breath-taking and seat wetting at the same time; seventeen words are more than enough to tickle the senses and excite the body when they come from your quill
Stay safe♥
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again....you do it everytime......your writes are so exquisite and soft....makes your imagination run wild.......you're the bestest writer/poetess on AP.....love your work.......love peace & harmony
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The pictures and the prompt. It's more than an ache. It's agony. Loving it "
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So very well done, congrats on the shiney
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Exciting!
I love this! It is very erotic, without the usual Eros!
Excellent word choice
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Fire you have in abundance.
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Haiku-lingus
Just too good. 'Still smiling... I love that when reading 'pleasured' I thought that it was a typo, which made me pause to think, then I read 'moans' and it falls into place...beautifully. 'Love that pause before the 'release' of 'moans'...
Crafty.
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Oh my dear lord... How did you manage this with only 17 words?! It's so sensual... I'm a little flustered! I especially love how "moans" is just out there on it's own... So the reader doesn't so much READ it as they do HEAR it. Great job!!
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Oooh seventeen words of delishness! this is wonderful...!
love
becca ♥
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Seventeen words of perfection. Wonderfully penned. You always leave them hanging--in suspense, that is.
Grrrrreat!
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I'm into it
The desires and emotions conveyed in such little wording is impressive. I like the placement of moans and how the lines before hand seem to go back and forth between male and female centered movements. The title is excellent as well, not what I was expecting.
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sorry...forgot the applause
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the art of writing is concision; as you have so eloquently elucidated to us. Great write. What's the point of offering criticism to this; it was all artistic choice, and poetic balance, which is very personal.
I like how you just left it hanging.
it let the reader think...about what the image was...
even though you didn't really use much direct imagery, the shortness left so much room to imagine...I like this poem more as I read it over. -
I can actually almost feel this...guess it's time for a shower!
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Short, sinful, sensual. But great, full of beauty and passion and lustful love. A mental image in my mind of a scene you so purposefully wrote.
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Always a terrific read! ^^ I know I must sound like a broken record but your poems are amazing.
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Fabulous
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Hot, hot, hot! Whew girl, you just go on with your sensual self!
Congratulations on the silver!
Much deserved~
All the very best to you!
Sandy
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Look at you! You got the Silver! 
Congrats, Rend! Well deserved, but shoulda took home the grand prize!
Love & blessings to you, as well
~ Tim
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Wow! Damn the first two lines HURT, they were that hot!! and i like where you leave it...
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Terrific use of the seventeen word limit!! (This contest is getting harder and harder to judge) You have crafted quite a beautiful piece of imagery here and the way it's displayed on the page leaves a feeling of anticip.....ation as one scrolls down the see the next lines of steam that come from it!! Thanks for the wonderful entry!!
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This had me licking my ips. I like the set up it adds to the feel of this. For it being as short as it was it was very hot. I enjoyed each words her wet aches the most. Wonderful work as always good luck in the contest. This is very well put together SH
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I love the way your poetic voice screams yoe does it so softly.
Love,
Amera♥
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nice
great write...definitely sets the mood...lawlz...
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Oh wow
I know that feeling! At least I think I remember! 
xoxo
KJ
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s delicious treat upon the feast and eyes for only two.. stunning and sensual well said hun hugs love♥♥
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A lot can be said in a moan!!
Love it Rend.
Just like you ~~hot~~
Joe
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I know just what wet ache you mean... point and impact achieved and with class!
Awesome thanks for sharing
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Very sexy, a very sensual write, not smutty at all or crude, tastefully done.
Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest! This deserves Gold.
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Short and beyond sweet
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17 words
that leave a taste in the mouth; smooth and brief as sexy silk... chocolate.
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Damn! Definitely meets the criteria for "Sinfully Sensual", that's an art I have not mastered yet. Probably never will be that good. Great use of 17 words. Good luck in the contest.
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Has anyone else left the cliche'd comment "short but sweet"? Oh well, it really does seem to fit this perfectly
This goes from a naught to one hundred in an instant.
Powerful writing with a minimum of words, you always handle this theme with exacting skill Rend.
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Very good.. but I never read your poem.. before I writen mine..
Now I inow what what you was talking about... I feel a littel better I am just so
acking every body body part I have hurts... JackReed3....
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Seventeen words of sensuality that savors on the tounge for a moment. OMG! Didi I say that?
I loved this! Not sinful at all though. Well...I guess it could depned on who is doing the licking. 
I did it again! LOL The best to you in the contest.
Much Love ♥
Renee
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had me at word one right through the moan. nice movement.
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Sinfully sensual indeed! Funny how the first poem I chose to read today would be this one, lol. You are so good at these...
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oh, hot! I can't imagine how anyone could write anything more sensual than this in seventeen words...good stuff!
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very steamy and so very sensual, I very much enjoyed your poem and totally loved it, My very best wishs in the contest, xoxo
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thank you so much!
I loved your comment,
but guess what? I read yours
and your is Stellar!
love and blessings
Rend
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Wow
oh my hot, hot, hot, such a sensual 17 words. best of luck in the contest
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crazy huh.. yeah well you should read the others
thank you so much for your comment, they are always
appreciated !ss
love and blessings
Rend
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Wooh Hooh Rend, this is sensual a l'extreme.
Love the way it flowed.
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thank you sweeties,
be there soon
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well done!
*looks up...
I like what you've done with the place..
twin lightning bolts
mmmm
my fav.
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Nobody can do steamy with quite the same affects as you
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as I have read yours my dear and its bar none!
you are too kind but that what makes me
love you sweeties
love and blessings
Rend
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Oh so sexy! Kinda makes you go 'mmm' and wanna go to bed early haha. I like the way you've seperated it out.
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Wow! man this is good...and I know how hard it is
to write in such few words I hope you win this contest, the piece is fantastic!
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Seventeen. Simple. Sexy.
You sure got a fighting chance in that contest.
Sunrise
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not even in the running!
but thats anyway there are some very
steamy writes in this contest!
thank you sweeties will be right over to return the favor
love and blessings
Rend
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What?! That ain't right. :-/
Shame... Well, I still think it's good. : D
Thankuu.
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Now that's seventeen words that spoke a delicious mouthful
Sexy indeed! Best of luck in the contest
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thank you Fiesty,
now thats a name i have been called a few times
love it and your comment,
love and blessings and welcome to AP
s
Rend
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Quite sexy.
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nice
but maybe a little too simple
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I smile someone down below said it was obscene
and now this is too simple, I am happy with simple
thank youss
love and blessings
Rend
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Every man wants to know the woman is turned on by him. Needs him, aches for him.
The opening lines and incredible invitation. A temptation is an understatement.
Second pair -- "claims her" reduces her to an object. Too often in sex we all become no more than willing objects.
Third pair -- "appetite" consumption without need to do more than fulfill the need. who is consuming who?
The last line, the moan, so many layers of innuendo, both release and mourning.
Good use of seventeen words. Creates the reaction set out to achieve. Well done.
Peace,
Tom B.
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oh but a woman wants to be claimed, and the object of his
affections, his desire, his whole consuming being. especially
if he is satisfying her ache first. yup! loved your comment
and thoughts,ss coming from you and I have read your poetry
you bring beauty and life to the pages of AP I tip my hat to you
sir.
love and blessings
Rend
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Hate to see a woman give up her personal power. It is rare, I know. But, I prefer mutual surrender, the power of passion holding the two cupped in its maw and the experience becoming transcendental. Then, love becomes part of the energy equation and it is not just satisfying needs but a sense of completion, not a competitioin of about dominance and submission. No, it becomes a partnering in excellence and exquisite creation of a magic that resonates for days. But I am going of on my own thoughts away from your poem. Enjoyed the poem, delighted in the skills you brought to it. Thanks for your thoughtful complimentary reply. I hope I am always worthy of it.
Peace,
Tom B. -
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I am too rebellious for that Tom
love to you Tomss
Rend
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well,this is surely a real;ly amaizing poem.superb work....................... -
mmmmmm
this is the kind of ache we all look for but few get to enjoy! excellent write! good luck in the contest!
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Well..This is my last poem to read tonight..good thing..one needs to get in bed after viewing this..lol..great job.So much with so few words,,wow
John
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A Sizzling Bullseye!
Rend,
Whuff! I hear the sizzle and pop. No doubt as to where the bullseye is painted dear! I think of the verse in the Song of Solomon 2:16 "My lover is mine and I am his; he browses among the lilies."
Jack
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wow!!
uummm....seventeen words sounded like a 2 hr porno. But more sensual. I liked it. Straight to the point!
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Great job on this one! I didn't know so much could be said with only 17 words! And you used the words you chose for full effect: exposing wet ache! That's brilliant!
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Good job.
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Seventeen words never tasted so good. I've said too much already. Great job.
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your killing me, that is too funny,
I guess you have to picture a whole lotta foreplay,
but what can you do with just 17 words, ??
thank you for the comment
Rend
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gung ho!
17 words and you go from the word....go......ahhhhhh action right from the word..go......grimacing and rejoicing in pain are ya..or the protagonist
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Welcome to AllPoetry!!!
This is definitely so sinfully sensual...made things heat up here as I read it! Thanks for sharing this steamy poem with us, sis!
Blessed Be,
Jeremy
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Obscene
I must confess it is a bit obscene to my liking... too explicit, too much information - tantalizing is enough, no need for licks... exposing is enough, no need for wet ache. But I must admit there is an appeal, a dark calling in your words, an unavoidable turn-on. -
oooh so so so good!!! i ache just thinking about it hehe Best of luck to you my sweet friend
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YUMMY 17 words
Deliciously enticing..whewww
Bravo
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Short, sweet, and ... oh so beautifully to the point...
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You win!
The best seventeen words ever read, oh not true. The best 14, no 21...
opps, I keep reading it.
Tecohe
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this is honestly just sinfully good, kind of make me think that i have just had my guilty pleasure for the day or something like that, lol, keep it flowing
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Well, dang Rend ~
and I was gonna get some coffee to help me wake up?
Steamy without being crude ~
true to your style, dear Friend! And I love the new formatting you're going with! Keep up the beautiful work & best wishes in the contest!
Love & blessings,
~ Tim
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Great write! Sensual....arousing....sexy! I really liked this piece!
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um, yeah, very well written Rend....(is this about flowers?) ..."feasting insatiably"....lol....great line. I like the shortness of your poem, with effective worded...Good luck to you
Erwin
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haha! Really nice and sensual. Very well-written. Really good job and a very Great Write!!! The imagery is cool. ^_^
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You have got your hand on the button of arousal and I would never want to sit beside you in waiting rooms or stand in lines of affected disconsolate old men.
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hmmm truly creates a fantastic image!
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Not much to say to that.....one thing comes to mind though!
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Ur the BOMB!!!!
U r 2 true 2 self......your poetic form is totally awesome......it moves you no matter how short your poems are......well-written......sensually spoken.....a true token of lovemaking in the raw......you score big time with your words of lore.....kudos girl.......LP&H
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Like WOW!
All you needed was 17 words...perfectly penned and perfectly jaw dropping. Well done and good luck.
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...speechless and in this case it's a good thing lol C
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For your Seventeen words, I'll give you just two in return...!
ABSOLUTELY DELISCIOUS!!
Vey well expressed!
John
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do seventeen syllables and you have senryu stanza and an even smoother style...
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Poet
Oh yes... Very personal indeed. The sharpe desires of the flesh never betrayed by this poets words. And , I am sure holding many a guy captive. Well penned.
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So simple and beautifully sensual! I love how you wrote this.
You did very well with your seventeen words here.
This looks like a Gold winner to me! I wish you all
the best and lots of luck with it my dear! Take care!
Jeremy0826
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