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Nice. [A Rap Song.]

i'm a crackhead
i'm a lowlife
i'm greedy and mean
i've been arrested three times
and i can't tell you why.

i'm a rebel
i'm a gangsta

[nasty voice in background:]
(if you can be both at once)

i'm a rapper
i'm a pothead

[nasty voice:]
(he's destroying his brain cells one. by. one.)

...but if you bother to get to know me...

i'm very nice -
nice as in pissed off.
nice as in don't-mess-with-me,
or i'll teach your kids to do weed.
nice as in handsome
with my low baggy jeans

[nasty voice:]
(how low can YOU go?)

nice as in sexy
don't you want a piece of this?
uh huh. you know you do.

i'm nice.
nice.
nice.
niceeee...
[fade]
[nasty voice:]
as in pissed off.

Author notes

"8 poets.
20 minutes.
10-40 words.

Prompt:
'I'm a crack headed low-life, I teach your kids to do weed.
I just talk to a jungle beat and its all for the greed.'"


Not my favorite. The prompt didn't do much for me.

"nice as in pissed off" = what my boyfriend said to me ten minutes ago when i inadvertently snapped at him--"i need to write, dammit!"--after he complimented me. i felt bad but andrew took it all in stride. he's been quietly reading his lit studies assignment since i started typing. we shall have a normal conversation as soon as i finish this. =]

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  • KnightOfTheRose gold member
    November 17, 2009

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    Very nice. I don't like rap at all but you did do a good job on the piece The ending was definitely my favorite. Great job on this piece and I wish you the best of luck in the contest.



    -Steve-


  • Not-The-Sun
    November 16, 2009
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    lmao; i love your AN.

    i've been arrested three times
    and i can't tell you why.


    this is hilarious, i loved it : )


  • Tzipora
    November 16, 2009
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    lol. angry? very interesting take on the prompt.


    thanks for entering.

  • Nikonic Freak
    November 16, 2009
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    oh shoot.
    i thought this said 10-40 LINES.
    and i wasnt counting those either...
    sorry about the length! =[

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