You would drown me
in a current of lies,
I can no longer float
in your sea of deceit.
must I sink like a ship
empty and scuttled,
or fly like a gull
into unknown skies?
A contest entry
- I can hardly breathe! by poetryality.
1400 points, ended November 17, 2009, 18 entries
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Comments
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The brevity is wonderful. The first stanza gave a negative edge but the second one, cleared it all away and took the poem to flight. Beautiful! Thank you for this fine entry, I wish you all the best in the contest.
Much Love ♥
Renee
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Oh how beautiful!!!!!!!!! You've put into words how I feel again, when I'm too tongue tied to try!
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Nice
Nice imagery here. When I read the last and lines and reflect on the picture prompt, I envision her taking that one last gulp of air and sinking below. Your brush feeds my creative eye well. Also, I love the title. Good job here.
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WONDERFUL!!!!
So much of life now seems to be deceit and lies, no truth anymore.
Some of us struggle on with the lies just so we are not alone but in reality we are alone. If we like the gull fly high and face the future we find our freedom. 's
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