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[ Save her ]

Save her
Keep her from harm
Those marks on her arm
Where the deeds occur

Save her
Help her find peace
Let her internal war cease
May my friend conquer

Save her
Tell her she's beautiful
Make her see she's wonderful
Say it until she's sure

Save her
Please oh I beg you
You must pull through
without her life is a blur

Save her
Becuase Im unable to
Saddly thats completely true
Save her

Save her
Because i cant save myself
My thoughts are too high on the shelf
Save her
Or I'm lost for sure

Because she, is me

Author notes

Um....its weird. I was just thinking and this kinda formed...so yeah.

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  • Angelshadow
    November 15, 2009
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    interesting poem...nice


  • mangopeelings
    November 15, 2009

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    this was great, i really didn't expect that kind of ending.
    i loooved it
    thanks for sharing and keep penning ,

    xoxoxo :]


  • black-waters
    November 15, 2009
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    Intense.