Due to the 5 stanza thing I would want to think of this as a limerick of sorts almost. The way it has a specific syllable count as well (limericks are known for their flow) makes me think of that form. Since it has just a hair of haiku in there (syllable count, and it has a modified rhyme scheme as well) maybe you could play around with the words a bit.. hairick, limku.. just ideas, but that's the reasoning I had with it. Where you could also come up with varying ideas would be with the stanza count (longer ones would be more complicated with the C rhyme thing) so that might be another area to explore as well (depending on how serious you are taking this form).
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Nature's Disappearance
A contest entry
- What's In A Name? Part B, One of the Most Unique Contests Ever!!! by S D McDaniel.
875 points, ended November 15, 2009, 6 entries
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believe me, I am taking this form very seriously. It is the first and only form I have created thus far, and it seems to be able to handle a multitude of subjects. It also tends to give poems that classic elegence that is sometimes missing in poetry today.
Thank you very much for your entry... and good luck in both contests!
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