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I Followed

I followed; onto a luminescent street. Pretty lights and neon colored swirls danced above my head; Imitating my confusion. I followed you, but I couldn't see you anymore. You dissolved into the mist like a broken dream.

I followed blindly and prayed I would be taken care of on this path to home. A man emerged from nothingness. I screamed and ran for my life. Where were you?

And they wonder why I don't believe.

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Another write questioning my faith.

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  • lovemesweetly
    November 16, 2009

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    interesting, mysterious, dramatic, wonderful
    just simply beautiful write

    keep it up


  • Sara Khan
    November 14, 2009
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    Mysterious and dramatic....excellent write.