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On the other side of midnight,
there I'll wait,
where the sky, a lighted carpet
of platinum shooting stars
and Saturn, in her midst,
will hold our dreams.
Its ring, a symbol
of eternal love,
where our world spins
the infinite carousel.
A whirling circle
rapid on its course,
slowing at the very
edge of time,
that we may grasp
this prized immortal ring;
then all will stand
in awe that they may view,
a love whose birth
will clothe the naked soul
and touch the fringes
of eternity.
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Author notes
Written April 16th, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- Want to Get Published? by dp robertson.
500 points, ended November 23, 2005, 146 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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thanks but no.
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So you’re the radiant image we see in all the dreams of us men
Dear me, again you’re simply painting an image that leaves a heart feeling as light as a wisp of magical dust all sparkling.
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WoW. I like this.
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yeah, must be my time to chill and read cool poetry. drifting away there. a great poem here i find in smiling life inot now.
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Wow very powerful! I love all the references to the starts!! Paints an awesome picture in my mind! Very nice write...keep penning!!
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wow... strong peice ....this a very good peice, it is very kool how you symbolised the rings....Bravo!
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awesome!
That is an AMAZING poem. I love it! The symbolism of the rings was perfect and not overdone at all. -
This is so dreamy and universal. I wish I could award you two awards but one is the limit. I would not change anything accept place a comma after 'ring' to give a pause, so that the following flows into the enjambment line smoother. But I can still give you a MONTREAL STANDING OVATION
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This poem is so lovely
Thanks for your entry
Yertweetyness
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