I gurgled down a one half thirty percent
With every swirl of the glass, my life was spent.
I felt sorry for myself, I'll have to admit
Should've taken the time, the time to commit
I'm as drunk as a whore on a saturday night
Gotta go for a spin, feelin' really uptight
So I'll crash behind the wheel of this dusty old car
Leaving my house, like I'm leaving the bar
I can't tell the difference between up and down
My head spinning like a top, when I look around
Them lights behind me, they're way to bright
I shut my eyes to forever close them out of sight.
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I like the title and the poem is very well written.In a strange kind of way it actually reminds the reader of the dangers of drink driving, probably the line that says "So I'll crash behind the wheel of this dusty old car" and "With every swirl of the glass my life was spent".Good poem.Montey
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really liked this a lot! everything flows excpet for maybe the last line. just a suggestion, but you could say something like "i shut my eyes forever and close out the night" or " i shut my eyes forever and turn off my sight". good job though!!
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