The questions are many -
Quite possibly
Endless
But what I foresee
Is speechlessness.
The glories haven’t
Been many
There have been
A few
I’d give every
Bit of it back
For you.
One look
Into those eyes
So blue.
To hear even
One low syllable
Against my ear.
The touch
Of a fingertip,
A kiss from your lips.
So many moments
Passed…..
They seem even
Emptier Now,
Somehow.
I was doing so well -
Having no longer
Condemned myself
To hell.
Lately living
In a limbo
Leaving me
No clue
As to which
Way to go -
Or when.
It’s been
Much too long
Since we’ve talked
My friend.
The love of
My life.
And Now?
The end.
Please tell me what you think
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Awww...
The heart break in this piece is breaks the readers heart... stirring emotions of empathy and compassion. I believe a sip flowing from the waters of Lethe would do. Oh! If only that were possible.
Best Always,
~April
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this is good free verse and I like the way you laid this out. I will say when i was reading it I got a little lost in the middle so I would throw a curve ball in there somewhere to keep the reader on edge but this is a fine poem!
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Hmm, an interesting and thought provoking piece. I particularly like the use of short lines, they're effective in conveying your message appropriately and clearly. Nice write, thanks for sharing.
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I know exactly what this poem means. I live it. Very poignant in MHO. I'm no critic but I like this write. It spoke to me.
Sharon
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This poem is hard for me to understand. The way you have broken it up mkes it unclear, especially in the first stanza.
The title of this poem makes me think of traveling, not this love story that you are telling. I would change it to something that connects better to your poem.
Otherwise, this poem is great -
Well Done.
Very good! This was definitely a story that kept me enthralled. I really enjoyed it. Thanks alot for sharing -
Very niiice.
Everything from the background to the last line is appealing to the eyes and to the mind.
Well done.
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I really like the way this is set out very easy on the eye and what lovely words to love the background and font. So easy to read and enjoy thank you very much for sharing
xx
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