I wish I had a ladder
that was long enough
to reach the sun
unscrew the skies bright bulb
carry it up the stairs
into my little room
placing it in a globe
on my desk
for when its cold
to warm my fingers
for when its dark
to have a little light
but mostly
because it reminds me of your smile
and I miss you.
A contest entry
- Falling off the cliff by Gold-feathers.
1800 points, ended November 17, 2009, 18 entries
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Aw, very nice poem. Very sweet, and you ignored the obvious truth of being burned alive by getting close to the sun, and that's a good thing. I like the line about building a ladder to the sun.
Very nice, and I liked how you ended it.
7/10
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I like this so many times we want to save something and a smile is certainly one thing I would love to save. Especially someone we love and miss. Great write.
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aw this was so sweet, and very well written, thank you for sharing
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whoops that's beautiful! I so so so love the simplicity of it and it's a pretty expression of stating love. just cute! I liked the way u did it so shortly! keep it up lol
thnx for entering
Ani
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Awwwww I always love and appreciate your poetry, so much, for its simplicity, directness and originality. You are a refreshing and touching voice!!
-Cassidy
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