in the hushed light of evening,
while the sun lingers just below the horizon,
i look from the window
and surrender to the haze of my own thoughts.
the sky: a spectrum
from why i love you -
to why i wished i loved you,
and of course everything in between,
in the hours of settling;
in the middle of night and day.
i've always liked the word betwixt
even without understanding it.
but it feels like a complicated way
of being caught between two somethings,
and complicated is all i've ever been.
we'll meet somewhere in the center of the universe
and watch planets spin by,
or we can just meet halfway between light and dark
and watch the stars blink on
as our eyes blink shut.
Author notes
prompt: twilight (as in the time of day)
also as being an in between place
In a list
A contest entry
- GRAND PRIZE 2000 POINTS 20 entrants rounds contest by foreveryourslove.
400 points, ended December 23, 2009, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Any ways i could have possibly make this any better?
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the ending absolutely blew me away, It took me some place where i forgot i was reading, that and my foggy mind is totally playing part, but the imagery in this was fantastic! And I can't get over the ending! wow..:]
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really? its that good?
i actually don't like it much...
thanks
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amazing :]
nice job.
plz read some of my poems if u r able and tell me what u think :]
thnx
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I like this a lot!
"we'll meet somewhere in the center of the universe
and watch planets spin by,
or we can just meet halfway between light and dark
and watch the stars blink on"
That's an excellent use of imagery. I especially love the first two lines of what I quoted - no matter what happens, you WILL meet again.
beautiful write.
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thank you oh so very much
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Beautiful imagery. Romantic and peaceful. Thanks for sharing this with us. Best of luck in your contest.
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thank you very much
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