Death,
You fucking bastard.
I hope you burn for all you do.
You take the lives of all these people,
and take them home with you.
I hate you with everything I can,
you can bet this is all true,
Death I hope you die over and over again,
to feel all the pain brought here by you.
I hope you cry and feel remorse,
black fire in your eyes.
I hope you go insane,
hearing your victims families cries.
I hope you go down to hell,
if not already there yet,
and go down and down still further,
as low as you can get.
Death I hope you read this,
and know what a bitch you are.
A pussy, douche bag, slandering whore,
who just wants more and more and more and more.
You can never take enough lives can you?
Oh no, 100's not a lot.
1,000
1,000,000
110!
No amount soils your plot.
You want all of us dead here don't you?
I know its burning in your non-existent soul.
The fear that humans will overtake you,
and send you back into your putrid hole.
Author notes
I hate death, did my point get across?
A contest entry
- Write a Letter to Death (Maniacally Macabre group ONLY) by TheGothicScorpion.
700 points, ended November 15, 2009, 16 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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Your poem is amazing and inspiring. Such anger towards death that all humans feel at some level.
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well this is really good and you really! get the message across ouch!but dead has to exist death overcomes the living
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I do beleive that you got your point across in more ways than one. Such unabated vitriole spewed at our hooded nemesis, such hate and disdain for the cowardly cowled cretin. Pussy, douche bag, slandering whore. My my such verbage from one so young. lol. You did well Uni, very well indeed.
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Damn. This one left me speechless. I actually don't know what to write.
I know its burning in your non-existent soul.
The fear that humans will overtake you,
and send you back into your putrid hole.
That was my favorite part. I really liked it a lot. It had a nice catchy flow to it that finished the poem great. Good write and good luck!
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wow
this really is amazing i loved it, the emotions so real and its catchy too
and we all get it that u hate death with a seering passion lol
WELL DONE
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I like your write, you get your feelings across very well. You have alot of passion.
this has fantastic imagery very well done
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I think you got your hatred for death across very well. I absolutely loved this! I could feel your rage with every word, and it seemed to increase as the poem flowed along then tapered off into a final harshly spoken thought in the last two lines. At least that's how it flowed and read to me. I love your imagery and descriptiveness of your hatred toward death. I particularly enjoyed,
"I hope you cry and feel remorse,
black fire in your eyes.
I hope you go insane,
hearing your victims families cries."
I also noticed a couple typos here and there that I kind of stumbled over. I think you meant to write "day" instead of "dear" in the second to last line... "ammount" has an extra "m"
And then, there are missing apostrophes, but that's just my pet peeve, Scorpion will let that slide lol.
Yep... I think you did an awesome job expressing the anger and hatred a lot of people feel toward death. You have definately spoken what's been on my mind lately. Thanks for entering and good luck in the contest!
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