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the past

People say they'll never change.
But it happens slowly
infests your body
leaving your organs
making a new you.
But I'll never change.
I'm the same girl that you made me
five months ago.
And you're a new boy
and the old you is hollow.
But I'm stuck right here
and I'm a girl from the past.

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Well I accidentally erased what I first wrote. But I sort of like this.. But at the same time I know what it means.

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  • Tinfoil Forest
    November 10, 2009

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    I like how short it is, because it's so powerful. It's been awhile since you've posted something, but your writing is clearly just as good (:
    Your first two lines are so true. I like this a lot