She looks in the mirror
day by day
to the fat person she is
her eyes fill with tears
her wrists spill blood
her throay brings up food
she looks at all these skinny girls
shes jelous
and hurting inside
all she wants is perfection
but thats to much to ask
she looks in the mirror
to her thunder thighs
to her belly flubber
to her massive hips
and cries
she doesnt want to be this way
she'd rather be a skinny bitch
than a chubby sweetheart
shes in the direction to
perfection.
What did you think of my poem?
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Welcome to Allpoetry!
There's no such thing as perfection. Being skinny isn't everything. It is what is on the inside that matters.
There's a few spelling errors in here, but other then that, it's just a raw piece of poetry that shows real pain.
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Welcome to AllPoetry
What a heart breaking poem this is for me as society has the wrong view of what is beautiful; every woman and man is beautiful as is though I am not one whose never had an eating disorder, I have so know the anguish you feel but I truly hope you see the reality of your beauty soon
Poetically I don't like critiquing a personal such as this but I think punctuation will benefit this mate
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nice. I liked it very much. loved the detailing in here.
But if you ask me i would go for a chubby sweetheart over a skinny beech anyday .. but well thats just me .. lol.
keep writing and sharing!
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