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Searching room

I opened a door
and entered a room
that was so white
so sad
and so empty

I sat in the corner
waiting for a shadow
a shadow to break
the light
the white

She entered
bringing a colour

A colour unknown to me
the red on her lips
a red that traced
the white

feeling a fake
comfort in a room
of red
the red room

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  • Warrior of Peace
    November 10

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    cute

    This is a very good poem. They're many ways people can bring color not in only in a room but also in your life. By the way they smile or they shine with love. You're life can be like rainow of family and friends in your life.