You are not human
you have no face...
your cold white surgeons gloves
blue gowns and stupid hats.
Material monsters...
Shove your masked face in mine
draw all over me, don't talk to me
thats fine, i'm a plastic dummy.
talk in that foreign language I don't understand
Like hell I know what it all is anyway
violate me, touch me where you will
Sitting on this narrow bed,
I hear the whirl of machines
beep... beep.... beep... beep... beep
thats my heart on that machine
a stupid machine thats keeping me alive?
you swarm over me like flies
poking me here, taking notes there
You pat me on the shoulder
you tell me i should lie back and let everything go
I scream at you!
i flail, I jump and whither
I scream, I punch, I kick...
You all hold me down by the legs and arms
I'm too weak for grown people like you
The room is so cold
you're so cold too...
I sob hysterically
you all promise me nothing will happen
those fucking white lies of yours...
but you don't give me a chance
You shove needles into my arms
you poison me with your drugs
What the fuck am I doing here?
why the fuck am I risking my life like this?
I search through the haze
and fight to say quietly "don't kill me"
Knowing full well ...
Death is an inevitable fate.
if its not now, it'll be another time.
Author notes
Prompt: Death, the one appointment we all must keep, and for which no time is set
A contest entry
- Picture, Word Bank, Quote OH MY!: Pick a Prompt for a Dark Write! by Concrete Angel.
1050 points, ended November 20, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
A penny for your thoughts?
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This is a fantastic take on the quote you chose! I liked the images you created of the poor soul trapped in the hospital with all these people poking and prodding and wandering around. It read like a play on the "appointment" aspect of the quote which I thought was very clever. The flow and structure of this... and your word choices... left me reading frantically as I could feel the emotions rise as this person knew they were coming closer to death. Brilliant poem here! Thanks for entering and good luck in my contest!
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Hehe thank you
Do you happen to be a Martina McBride fan? Your name reminds me of her song. Its one of my favourites, but haven't listened to it in awhile 
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And this would be my second favorite. This is a very emotional piece, particularly because you've described this portion of your life to me in detail and I felt your pain then and I feel it now. What I like most is the consistent theme that much of our lives is completely out of our control, including most of what we think we are in control of - and that death is a certainty.
The one thing that I think could use changing is the title - I don't think it does justice to what is truly an incredible poem! Aside from 'inevitable fate' being slightly redundant, the title doesn't seem to capture the main theme of the poem - which, I think, is about how powerless we really are.
I hope my input is helpful! If not, don't worry about it, because this is a really good piece as is :-) -
Whoa.
That flowed, exceptionally quick. I've read few poems where I start reading, and before I know it, I'm at the end. Very frightening subject, and realistic. Your rhyming was exceptional, and not forced. I can barely pull that off myself, so my poetry is a 'my own style' type hehe. I really liked this read.
Scary, and a stark reminder of some of the darker stuff I've been through in the past. GREAT job and good luck on that contest!
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Brilliant penning dear
angst, sadness, and pure, real raw emotions explodes from this piece
very poignant yet wonderfully written..i love the dark genre
Of couse, I live my life in the darkness, he is my friend
::honey, with the "fuck" work you may want to lable this adult ::
:: i believe the term "fuck" is the most versatile word in our language ::
However, the fken mods really get ugly over this if not labled properly.
Love,,David
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