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No Going Back

I read his letter
from beginning to end,
his words slanted
and so sharply penned,
they felt like paper cuts
under my skin -
"I cannot be just a friend."

So he punished me
with his words once again,
daring me to remember
begging me to give in,
to release myself
once more to him -
"You are my beautiful sin."

I tore up the pages,
let them blow in the wind,
watched my past disappear
across the waves of the ocean,
and I prayed that we both
would forget and be forgiven...




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  • Aussie Gypsy
    November 28
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    See you were and always have been wonderful at conveying a message, I think we've always had moments like this in our lives, where things were better left unsaid. Brilliant as always


  • turpentine
    November 27
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    So descriptive...


  • PerVirtuous
    November 26
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    We do not fly by will or the strength of our good deeds, but by being light enough to sail on the passing zephyr. When you rip the pages into tiny meaningless random words they fly! When our thoughts are no longer of the artificial self we create with our words and deeds, then and only then can we afford the luxury of allowing the real self to intervene and soar upon the zephyr of power. We are not defined by what we hang on to, but by what we let go. This is an excellent example.


  • paulcreates silver member
    November 22
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    ... beautiful.


  • Lacer
    November 16
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    This is a very strong and powerful write. Nice work.


  • Peteskid gold member
    November 16
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    some strong feelings here, but these are paths that cross and divide without any real reason, just as we see things differently merely on a different day...beautiful poetry here...PK


  • Travis64
    November 15
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    I liked the line, " ...his words slanted and so sharply penned, they felt like paper cuts under my skin..." I felt the pain from the cuts...I also enjoyed the images you conveyed...full of emotion....so much feeling...great write!


    ~Travis


  • Rend the Veil gold member
    November 15
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    my dear friend,
    I read your heart in every aspect
    that could be found, it does seem your
    thoughts parallel mine even in this write,
    I havent been able to express my self as eloquently
    as you but non the less i feel this write so relatable
    its almost uncanny, and yes it ripped me apart and
    I had to let my thoughts blow to the wind, until I
    was reminded of yours today.

    just beautiful Laney ss

    Rend

  • ora106
    November 15
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    this is so good i love how it made sence

  • godforsaken07
    November 15

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    people are so insensitive to judge someone's emotion with words...i don't really have words to praise it

    people are so insensitive to judge someone's emotion with words...i don't really have words to praise it.


  • NotQuiteElle
    November 14

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    I really enjoyed this, great write.

  • Angel Alias
    November 14

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    thats my life...
    did it kill you as much as it killed me to ignore the letter?


  • bigperm gold member
    November 14

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    I think this is the first rhyme I've read from you.

    I'm diggin the piece...it has a very lyrical quality that helps the flow.


  • Thomas Scott gold member
    November 13

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    It's all been said.
    Should have read this sooner and made a really good comment.
    grins


  • emovampire
    November 13
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    amazing love it


  • tara wilson gold member
    November 12

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    I love the words as paper cuts while holding the letter. I love the past disappearing with waves of the ocean. a very well written truth Lane about love and life. we think we won't forgive and forget but we do.


  • The Rivaling Mimic
    November 12

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    Magnificent! Is this a form of some kind. I noticed the way the lines were sounding like music and were structured in a way. Excellent!

    The Rivaling Mimic

    • Dalaney gold member
      November 12
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      No form, at least, one that I no of...lol I hate to say this, but I don't know very much about form poetry, but thank you so much for liking my poem

  • beezer16
    November 11
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    Some great lines in this write. Really good work.


  • sweet arrival gold member
    November 11

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    the timing of this is so perfect. i guess really, it is a timeless experience we all go through in some sort of way, if not the literal one. having to let someone go when there is a bond is incredibly hard, and you write it so well that i didn't even realize tears had formed until one just hit my keyboard. you have that way of digging in deeply and pulling out what i didn't even know was still harbored inside, even if it is a different scenario. omg, lane, i think i may need to write my own letter and burn it in our firepit, watching the ashes rise and smoke release... leaving me with only my own fingerprints made by the soot.

    then i can wash my hands... and forgive. maybe.



  • Cup-a-Joe
    November 11

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    Harvey,

    Write me a poem on burping. I know every one will love it and it will make the front page.
    You are coolier than a cucumber, ya know?

    Joe

  • MoonlightStars gold member
    November 11

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    Great work. Loved "watched my past disappear across the waves of the ocean". Thanks for sharing.


  • Pure Thought silver member
    November 10

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    You never forget my Lady, evidenced by this poem coming out now from a few years ago.


    • Dalaney gold member
      November 10
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      No, I suppose we don't. But, at least it doesn't hurt anymore


  • nordicsky silver member
    November 10

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    We can not go back... Only forward in the hope that we will be fogiven for the hurt we have caused along the way.

    As usual, you echo my deepest most secret thoughts with perfect poetry.

    Love, Peter


    • Dalaney gold member
      November 10
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      Peter thank you. I hope you are doing well and enjoying warm cozy evenings. I will write to you soon xoxo


  • Beautiful Sin-
    November 10
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    ... Beautiful.. Wow..
    I'm speechless..


  • amberplatten
    November 10

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    Amazing

    A truly beautiful poem. Very emotive. Love everything about it.


  • Sue Cardwell gold member
    November 10

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    If this was your standard a few years ago, I wonder what you were like when you first wrote down your thoughts.
    As always, a piece without fault and a poem worth reading.

    Love
    Sue


    • Dalaney gold member
      November 10
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      Sue, you are the kindest person...thank you for always encouraging me xoxox


  • arafura gold member
    November 10

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    I think most of your readers will relate to this Lane. We've all been on one side or the other of this equation. Wonderful (as always!).


    • Dalaney gold member
      November 10
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      John, and as always, I thank you from the bottom of my heart for reading


  • LivingxXxProof
    November 10

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    I'm in a position like this right now. So I can really relate to this. it's amazing, As usual.


    • Dalaney gold member
      November 10
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      I hope you come through it better, stronger, wiser...but, still...always keep your heart open. xoxox


  • Keith Drew gold member
    November 10

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    Good girl, always be true to yourself.
    Are you listening?


  • JinSays gold member
    November 10

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    I think you could write the crappiest poem ever written and people will regard it as a Message from God. Guess it has everything to do with persona, right? What are you doing playing with amateurs when you should have people doing the typing for you? You should be signed with some house, and vacationing in Malta. (okay, maybe Jamaica).
    Will you remember your old friends when you're rich and famous?
    I hope so, would love to have you over for supper while you're hobnobbing with Hollywood's elite. Nothing fancy, potato-chip sandwiches and Orange Nehi. How does that sound?
    love,
    jin

    • Dalaney gold member
      November 10
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      Jin, you always ALWAYS make me smile and laugh. Darling, I will never be rich and famous, but I am sooo rich in friendship and love, and for this, I thank you because you are a part of it here. Hey, I love orange Nehi!! Catch you soon....xoxoxox


  • Catie Sheeran gold member
    November 10

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    omg...I love this...I know exactly what this is about. and I am going through it now. tho it's getting a little easier..

    great poem!

    • Dalaney gold member
      November 10
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      Catie... It's hard, but it's life. Drink some Chai Tea Latte, smoke a doob, and kick back...love comes when you least expect it hope all the narc's out there are in bed


  • Matt E. Smith gold member
    November 10
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    ouch. I know this one well.
    nicely put.


    • Dalaney gold member
      November 10
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      It's humbling...at both ends. Thank you for the applause


  • moonbumps silver member
    November 10

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    Oh Lane-what a Godsend your words are to us all-unbelievably beautiful they just fall onto the page...
    Hilly xxxxx


    • Dalaney gold member
      November 10
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      Hi Hilly!! Sending you a HUGE hug and kiss. How are you?? Going to read some of your poetry tonight xoxoxo


  • John BoSox
    November 10

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    Very nice poem..Love washed ashore...gone forever.Good imagery in this piece.Your thought expression is excellent..I enjoyed it very much


    John


  • Daizee silver member
    November 10

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    In the simplest of words, you've written of something so complicated I think everyone's experienced at some time. The ability to look ahead and beyond the past is one of the hardest things in life.


    • Dalaney gold member
      November 10
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      Thank you soooo much for coming by Hope you are doing well


  • Jersene gold member
    November 10

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    nicely penned.

    there are always gems to be found in old writes, especially when we have new perspective upon them. Enjoyed


  • jazzcat gold member
    November 10

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    Wonderful write. I think many of us have lived this scene -- regrets, rememberance, and understanding of what has transpired. You bring it all to light here and we feel it. Sometimes, forgiving means tearing up old letters, tearing up the past and burying it. Nicely done.

  • Rowan gold member
    November 10

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    I think about all the discs of my older work and cringe, not so much that they are bad, which they probably are, it's more the faces they'd bring to mind. You never forget, you just simply put them aside to collect dust so they don't look so pretty. winks. Well done, thanks for bringing this one back.


  • malmadre gold member
    November 10

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    Good for you on ripping that letter, how dare any man who would not be willing to just breathe the same air, or share a part of your world, give an ultimatum, it's "all or nothing" He must have felt pretty special, but then he loved you obsessively. I've done that, and it's painful to be in the presence of your obsession and be just a friend. The punishment goes back and forth, and what do we have in the end, a friendless, loveless existence that affects both.
    This one made me explore my own angst about an old relationship.

  • Topnotchsy
    November 10
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    Nicely written and nicely done.


  • cricketjeff gold member
    November 10

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    delicious, I love looking back at old writes from the best poets. The light rhymes and the deft word use make the whole sad piece sing.

    Great stuff



    Jeff


  • Warrior of Peace
    November 10

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    wiw

    Very good poem. Sometimes remembering will help you be stronger. You both will eventually be forgiven. You're a good writer


  • Nicolette gold member
    November 10

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    We are all just memories, aren't we? And how well you write them. This is one of those poems that is personal, yet speaks to a universal audience. Beautiful

    ~ Nicolette


  • Amera gold member
    November 10

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    My Sister wrote that! See why I'm so proud!

    Love,
    Amera


  • Cannonsfire
    November 10

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    Those are the memories we thrive on to write the words... C


  • csmmoms2
    November 10

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    You be up real late girl. The heart is a real funny thing...it likes to remember pain. You'd think that it was made for this. -c


  • Xianaria gold member
    November 10

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    I think I've been in this place in my life a time or two...
    I have a regret from a number of years back that keeps poking its head out to cause me grief. I can relate to the closing lines, just pray that we forget and be forgiven. (This is from my pre-AP days...)

    Nicely ~ and sadly ~ written, Laney.

    ~ Tim


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    November 10
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    ... and it's pretty beautiful.

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