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The First Thanksgiving!


Here's the story
of a Pilgram named Davy
who was busy raising free very lovely gords
all of them were orange and brown
unlike each other, but alas, was still bored.

It's the story, of an Indian Bravey
who was busy raising free gords of his own
nevermore, he gave them to blood brothers
yet he was all alone.

Until the one day when this Brave met this fellow
and they knew that it was much more than a hunch
have a feast, display their gords together
that's the day they started the first Thanksgiving Lunch
served turkey and punch
they made a bunch
that the day-- we celebrated
Thanksgiving Brunch!

Author notes

I decided to go with Option 3. No # 3? Yes I know it's very weird and that I'll get DQ'ed, but it's my first time, so be gentle.

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  • savemysoul
    November 10

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    ahh, holidays excite me : ) great writee steve, like always.

    -- jordan.


  • Denerica
    November 10

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    Wonderfully done to the Brady Bunch theme. You had fun with this I see, bro. Excellent. Blessings.


  • Pisces rainbow gold member
    November 10

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    very creative

    with your wonderful rhyme

     

    A delight to read my brother

     

    God bless you my friend...