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Lisp.




Tongue comfortably resting between teeth,
smoothly slips subsequent to
‘s’





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Prompt: Tongue



and that's how the cookie crumbles, my friends.

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  • n.e.o.n gold member
    November 10

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    Ha. I loved this. I enjoyed the diction. I wish you much luck, and I'm hoping you win something. Short but simple and profound in a way.


  • Pheonix
    November 10

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    I just love alliteration. Absolutely loved reading this. Beauty in simplicity, even if its not the nicest poem. Best of luck in the contest my friend.


  • Tzipora
    November 10

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    this would not be the first thing to come to mind for this contest for me. very basic, yet somehow very creative.

    i liked this alot. nicely done.


  • Matt E. Smith gold member
    November 10

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    lol this is not a very kind poem. clever alliteration