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whats wrong

No kiss today
your hand in mine,
it slips away

i sit here waiting for you to call
expecting a phone to ring
i find nothing at all
perhaps its anxiety,
maybe there's nothing wrong at all

A hug could fix this mess
i walk towards you,
holding out my arms in distress
you run bye
my wants you seem to defy

i walk my way,
and you walk yours
perhaps itll be better..
maybe the next day

i talk to you,
and you talk back
there's emptyness
an unseen crack

for as i speak
what im here to say
my words spill out 
the wrong way

and all i get in return
is a mumble a groan
a slight churn
sometimes a simple moan

is it something i did,
why wont you say
i must rid these thoughts from my head
for in the end i know you care
but my logic seems to think its unfair

and all i need is a simple smile
a touch on the chest
i can wait a while

but the slightest sign that you care
and i am content
everything is fair

fuck my mind and these evil thoughts
nothing is wrong
i just care lots....



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im ending this, i cant bare it this fucking anxiety, you wont pay attention to me, you treat me like shit? i deserve better

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  • ltreitman
    November 22
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    LOVE IT

    I know how you felt. I never want you to feel this again


  • Rachel Vargas
    November 9

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    heartfelt

    i like the way you exposed your feelings i believe this is a topic we can all relate in some way. keep writing take care~ rachel


  • PoeticPashun
    November 9

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    Very heartfelt.......angry....yet sad....yet in love...perhaps a few regrets....
    If this is from a true experience.......I would have to say shed yourself from the anxiety....
    Good write though


  • TwiztidMaggot
    November 9

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    I can definately relate to this piece. Don' t you just love when people do that to you??? (Didn't think so) You did an amazing job writing this piece. Keep up your amazing work! And remember this: YOU DON'T NEED SOMEONE WHO TREATS YOU LIKE THAT! Find someone better.

    TwiztidMaggot


  • KateMadness
    November 9
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    Wow.

    That's pretty deep. D:

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