We don't need more speculation
Psycho-babble and corporate speak
It's all a part of this mass hallucination
Where the law of the jungle hunt down the weak
Why can't we learn to leave things alone?
Instead of pulling down fences
Then building up another wall
We don't need more anti-discrimination
Political correctness and bureau-talk
We point the finger with character assassination
With our money talks and bullshit walks
What is it with our constant double-speak
When we're cutting down tall poppies
And building up another wall
The tower of Babel didn't do that well
When the lord took umbrage
And down it fell
Adam and Lilith were never compelled
Because when Adam complained
The good lord sent her down to hell
We just never, ever learn at all
Another case and another wall...
A contest entry
- Walls We Build by drifting cloud.
550 points, ended November 26, 34 entries
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I like this. We build up more walls when one is torn down - how true. Thank for sharing your poetic talent in the ‘Walls We Build’ contest.
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You've got good rhyme throughout the poem, though there are a few lines here and there that throw off the overall rhyme scheme. I suggest in line 11, "With our bullshit walks and money talks," because "money speaks" is a little odd.
Overall very nice. = -
decent rhyme
good content
nice construction
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and the cycle continues
building walls of hate and pride
conflict...
'Babel'
If you want separation, here you go
said the Lord (o.k. I said it
)find your own way home (thats me too
)gosh we are lost
love your commonsense
God bless you my friend...
God bless you my friend...
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Love it how you brokenly rhyme here =) it adds a nice flow, but doesn't overdo it (like I always do ^.^) It's a nice view on walls, being obstacles in our lifes that we create ourselves to our own worse. Good job!
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