The car came screeching to a stop
I had been tossed into a shallow ravine
I was sore, shaky, shivering
My belongings were scattered on the rough road
The blood from the ripe gash on my head
flowed slow, feeling silky and smooth
as it dripped steady down my face
The driver, in a robust, resonant voice
called out: “Hey! Are you OK?”
He had a square and solid build
His demeanor was sharp and repulsive
His breath reeked of the odor of stale beer
In a selfish moment
he hesitated with his cell phone
When emergency services came
his state would be known and he’d
be charged as DWI
He said: “I’ll call 911”
I managed to say: “Splendid”
Author notes
I used all of the adjectives:
repulsive, resonant, ripe, robust, rough
scattered, screeching, selfish, shaky
shallow, sharp, shivering, silent, silky
slow, smooth, solid, sore, splendid
square, stale, steady
A contest entry
- Adjective word bank #3 by GotLilt.
900 points, ended November 9, 5 entries
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Comments
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Great story telling giving the characters flesh and feelings. Good imagery and flow drawing the reader in, seeking the 'what happened next'. The sarcasm and shock work well in this poem, well done
Write on! Best of luck in this contest.
Brother Dennis
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LOL
The dry sarcasm - oy, good stuff! -
Oh my you sound angry, with good reason! Thanks for entering my contest.
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