Dad I wish I could tell you that I love you but I don't even know who you are
Dad just because you're not here doesn't mean you haven't left people with scars
Dad I feel so alone and I feel like your the one to blame for every problem I have because you left me with so much pain
I wish that you could be here things would have turned out so differently
I wouldn't feel so lonly and I wouldn't feel like I wanna die
Dad why did you have to go and make me cry
I'm sorry I can't help this I just need you so much because without you here it's just to tough
Dad everything feels like it's turning out wrong and without you here I don't feel so strong
Dad one day I hope to see you so you can wipe these lonely tears away that I cry throughout the night and day
Dad when I see you I hope I can talk to you about how I feel and get some advice from you so I can turn my life around and feel the way I'm supposed to feel.
A contest entry
- Vent. by Walking Oxymoron.
700 points, ended December 1, 58 entries
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What do you think? Do you have any advice? Is there something different i should do? Do i need to change anything?
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Its very emotional. I relate to it too well, 4 my bio dad and step-dad have left. Yet strangly enough, sometimes I wish I had a relationship with either one of them. I just seen so many pple leave in my life, that Im left with scars. keep writing, you did well
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Wow, that's really sad!
Not knowing who your father is... I can empathize a little with this..
It's very natural to blame him for your issus, because a, he's not there to defend hnmself, and b, him not being there gives you an easy excuse not to face whatever issues you do have. Laying blame means there's no reason to look at your issues in the face. It's almost like an easy way of dealing with it.
I know someone else in the same situation...
Your last line was really touching... 'feel the way I'm supposed to feel'
Perhaps you are supposed to feel the way you do now? You're supposed to mourn the loss of your dad, and maybe one day you will see him again?
I did. And met my older brotehr and sister too.
Just know, that if you do cinduct a search, it doesn;t always go right.
My sister and I get on Very well.
My brother and I ignore the fact that each other exists.
And meeting my Dad did not solve every problem I had... but it did satisfy my curiosity.
--If you wanna talk about this, you can PM me whenever you like. I may be able to help, of if not, I can listen some. -
this is good i dont have a dad but this is good ansad
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I think you shouldn't have tried to rhyme at all. For a poem such as this that tells your feelings, rhyming might have been unnecesary. [sp?] One thing that I would say to you is that you shouldn't blame your dad for not being there. A lot of things go wrong in our lives, and unfortunatly you have probalby learned that froma young age. Feeling emotions like this is normal.
I would suggest that you never forget that god is there for you.
People can always let you done, but God will never. Even when it seems liek he already has in the end his perfect timing will come in and save you. I encourage you not to give up and start to feel like this because of your dad. Don't let hate control you and don't feel worthless bc he isn't there.
If you ever need to talk to someone...i'll listen. If you don't like all the God advice i'm sorry...i don't want to offend you.
And last, but not least your poem was very inspiring for me to write something. I enjoyed reading this & i hope you get to meet your dad.
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