Silence slurs and loneliness explodes
Whilst togetherness, closeness evaporate
Nakedness and passion fall away
Slowly, silently like rose petals
From a dying rose…
A flower vase filled with emptiness
Once overwhelmed by the sweet smell
Of blossoming fragrances…
Each day a petal fell without a fault or blemish to the ground
In silent seclusion turning to loneliness…
Author notes
I hope this is thought provoking and people get it without commenting on my... but to read between the lines
A contest entry
- i had everything once. by sighingflosser..
400 points, ended November 20, 13 entries
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I agree in this being relatable, the imagery of your words alone speaks volumes of depth, and might I add you put it together amazingly, thank you for sharing sweetie, love ya always, Josie
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This is so relatable. You've described the sweet feelings of new love and a dying relationship quite well. With your words you made it seem not so painful. I really enjoyed reading this piece and wish you luck in the contest.
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Interesting metaphor
Everyone always understands the bloom of love, but rarely do I see the end of a relationship compared to the death of this same flower. Nicely done. Plus it has a wonderful element of acceptance with no blame, it was just the natural course. -
Feels like the entropy of existance, as we all grow old, and watch everything end, until we finally end ourselves.
I would imagine, if Caligula ever felt a softer despair in the end of his later life, he would have felt this sort of sentiment.....even evil feels sorrow.
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