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Because of You

Because of you my heart now breaks
Because of you my spirit aches
Because of you all love is lost
Because of you I paid the cost

Because of you I feel no pain
Because of you I will never be the same
Because of you I don't know what to do
And all of this happens because of you.....

 

 

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  • XRainbowliciousX
    November 9

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    This makes me think of the kelly clarkson song. lol. Advice: No matter what you think or how bad this person seems to have hurt you...at some point in time if you don't watch for the same things to happen again they surely will. And like the person below said....don't let one person bring you down. Honest it's not worth it they are very very correct.

    You can move pass this

    The poem was very emotional and the reader could conect with you very well. If i had to say that something was wrong, I would say that you didn't describe your pain enough or how bad you hurt. You put the words aches and love is lost, and etc, but you never really let us see what was happening....

    Good job


  • WideEyedSuicide
    November 9

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    Losing the one you tuly love is hard. But never let a single person bring you down to where you lose all hope in living. It's not worth it, no matter what you think, there are other people out there. You can't blame one person for ruining your life when you're letting them, being depressed over it, you're letting that other person win and feel accomplished. This was a great write. Keep up the good work!