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This is Death

Smiling cordially,
whitened teeth clenched tight,
    just below their breaking point.

Speaking highly,
    with head held up
    and neck so strong.

Awaiting, longing,
a long delayed fulfillment
    of creative release.

Finally,
    to topple
          stacked pretensions.
              Finally,
                    to strip away falsity:
                        obstructions
                              of truth.

On the brink of tears
    releasing creativity.
          To silence the cancers;
          snuff out the flames of their hell.

Author notes

Feeling very anxious. I'm at school and I have an overwhelming urge to do something, arouse some reaction, rid us of the monotony, fucking hit someone, I don't care. I figure this is more constructive to my creative side... hmm... yet conterproductive to the problem which still exists as I sit in silence on my computer. WE ARE NOT LIVING!!!! WE ARE DYING! I'M NOT GOING DOWN WITH THEM! (Might edit later. Spacing is new...)

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  • You did well penning the emotion explained in your author's notes. Creativity can most certainly be a great outlet - doesn't always work, as you've noted, but it's usually worth the effort.

    Well done, dear!

    & Blessings,
    ~ Jan ~