I have closed my eyes too many times
And sighed in the pouring rain
I have danced in the breeze like wind chimes
And then burned in Hell again
For in the chasm of my young heart
Portraits are hung on white walls
Paintings of those from whom I am apart;
I could not forget them all
Yet as I look upon those faces
I fear they will turn to gravestones
I wish to be back in young places
Where our friendship could be grown
I see before me phantoms of friends
Mere remnants of what once was
Yet all I pray is for amends
And the redemption of my flaws
For every grave tells an epic tale
Of a life that was once here
For they are portraits of gains and fails
To all those who held them dear
And all around me I see ghosts dance
In writhing, beautiful spins
But I keep praying for my one chance
For our love to again begin
Tears fall when I look into your eyes
And I long for time to pause
I look in my heart, where friendships lie
And see portraits of what once was…
Author notes
I wrote this poem about old friendships that I long to continue, but because now I am in college it's hard to keep up with them. I did have a specific friend in mind when I wrote this poem and I wish that everything could just heal. I'm so frustrated with myself and how hard it is to keep in touch.
This Poem was written on 10/27/09 at 11:53 PM
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wow... thank you for this masterpiece
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Beautiful poem, it really sucks one in =)
You can clearly feel the pain of your loss here, and I hope you'll keep in touch with your friends anyways =)
Great!
Joshua
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I can feel the frustration at what is lost... friendships are forever... and when you actually can not keep up with someone you actually care for just because of distance it is beyond... every explanation. I consider myself lucky that I still have contact with them all and wherever we are we surely get together once every two months.... It simply is an awesome feeling.
The following line are specially beautiful...
For in the chasm of my young heart
Portraits are hung on white walls
Paintings of those from whom I am apart;
I could not forget them all
Thank you for sharing this beautiful write...
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excellent
I've read a few of your pieces and you have a unique style it's very rhythmic and it just flows so naturally this piece is no exception to that pattern
the emotion is just pouring out of this piece and excellent word choice you can feel that it is written to multiple subjects yet one in particular and I really like that it gives it direction without becoming stale
very well written piece
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I like this...very good and well put together.
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i can feel the yearning and regret from your words. your opening stanza is perfectly written and catches the attention immediately. "Tears fall when i look into your eyes", this line took me out of it a little bit because your story here is about the people you're apart from, so if you could "look into their eyes", it's a little too intimate and doesn't really flow well with the rest of this piece. just my thoughts. but apart from that, nicely done!
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Beyond Words..
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"I see before me phantoms of friends
Mere remnants of what once was"
tis sad that I feel this way about some of my college friends. =/
beautiful write though. definitely enjoy reading your poems
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aww such a pretty poem i love it.
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Friendship is long lasting, but sometimes it is fragile as well. I found this piece to be full of emotion. I hope you get a happy ending. ~gypsy~
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Aww hon it is hard with life so hectic to keep in contact but you know I just had a message off a friend I havent spoken to in 7 years lol so there's hope that your 'friend' will also one day talk to you again water runs under the bridge all you have to do is wait for it to get to you
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i like it a lot!
full of emotion ...makes u think
keep writing xD
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I like it alot. It has alot of emotion behind it. I dig it
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:)
This poem was beautiful, really contemplative. Makes the reader think, and that in itself is admirable.
The following piece is very personal to me, I am trying to get as many poeple to read and comment it as possible.
Justice
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