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Poem of Misery

The wind sweeps away the sorrow of a thousand words.
I have learned to deal with the pain that you create.
My eyes flash with regret, I regret coming to this place and meeting you and such an unstable state.
I wonder how my life would have gone, if I delt with the remorse of knowing who you are.
I see the butterflies fly in a million directions.
I try to follow them but my heart fills with tension.

Who knows the way this world works, and why it spins so quickly?
I deny every meeting myself in this vally of death, ever holding my self so tightly, where I couldnt breathe.

My hair knots and tangles to the sound of your voice.
You call me to your presence but I run with tears of the rain.
Dripping down like blood from a razor blade, you comfort me.
But I have learned of you evil ways, of you horrible plans for society.

You take me down like a social kitten, throw me around like string in your paw.
I know your intentions, to seduce me in the night.
I dont want you, I dont need you.

You are like a knife digging into my flesh, pouring out the blood of an innocent,
slowly killing me, I begin to lose sight of what really matters.

You are nothing but a boy, no man.
And I shall tell you,
What you have done to me,
will come kick you in the ass someday.

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  • darksilver137
    November 9
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    I wonder who this is about....


  • Rovingone gold member
    November 9

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    There is a lot of pain and anger, some regret in this poem. You make a graphic that scrapes the skin like a sharp blade. It really gets the point across.


  • awannabepoet
    November 9

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    You tell em, say it like it is!

    Nice and to the point kind of poetry, I like it allot.