I tried to reach out for the sun
But only touched the moon.
I tried to pen a sweet love song
But couldn’t write the tune.
I tried to swim the ocean
But then drowned in my lagoon,
So I'd failed in everything I'd done
And gave up all to soon.
My heroes turned to vapour,
Ambition turned to dream,
I wrote those words on paper
Expecting much it seemed.
I tried to find the words I craved
To fill this crumpled ream,
To tell the world about my love
And ease my low esteem.
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I feel like this most of the time... I take it my mind is just full of &*%*@...
Still, personally, I don't think you have writer's block here.
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Sometimes it is writers block and sometimes it seems we have said it all before, but your sweet and sad lament is familiar to us all. Nice rhyming and imagery in this, particularly the first line which captured my attention.
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Hope you don't mind me commenting twice Dan but saw this in groups listing and couldnt resist reading again. Even though it is called frustration, it is such a lovely poem.
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Definitely fits, but oh, it is way too good for writers block. Everything in it seems to flow so effortlessly. Wonderfully full of rhythm and rhyme.
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Yes, it can become frustrating when you can't seem to write what you want ... do what I do ... just sit and write anything. A friend told me to write a limerick if all else fails and believe me, it usually works for me.
At least your muse inspired you enough to write this piece ... so it's not completely AWOL.
Sue
x
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I tried to ease my low esteem
to bring it up a notch,
I pulled it in and held it tight
I think this time I botched
it fell into the toilet bowl
and circled in the flush
my self esteem is sucked away
as booze within a lush....
A hush falls over me as I
close the door to cry
and though may seem a tragedy
I will the world defy....
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There is no such thing as failure Dan. You are researching the possibilities.
Mind you, I feel the same as you have described in your poem at times, but salvage the self esteem by calling it 'pressure of work'. I am not sure how it works because I am long retired, but it does. Love your poem it's all too often true.
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I think I am feeling like that these last few days.
heroes turned to vapour
Your poem sums up what many go through at one time or another.
good one
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Whatever you write Dan you put your heart and soul into it and this poem is no different.
As Legend said most of us get times when inspiration just refuses to come. I often wonder why I bother it all seems a bit pointless post it then on to the next one. Some people on here post one or more a day their poems number into the hundreds. I don't often go back to the start of someones poetic threads when hugely long.
I tried to swim the ocean
then drowned in the lagoon,
I failed in everything I done
And gave up all to soon.
Some of us failed without even trying ..
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To very true my friend walked this path many times(in utter frustration) Guess it is a phase we all go through at some time Though it does make it wonderful once we come out the other side
Great piece and a pleasure to read
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Been there too...a fickle mistress that muse!
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What low esteem..hahaha!!!!
Great poem Dan as usual....all your poems are such a lovely surprise as they
are all so diverse....please try harder to find the words you crave to tell about your love...we can't wait!
Fab poem...Love Lu x
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Ahhh.. Dan, can I ever identify with your words. Ambition turned to dream, profound to me. I loved this.
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What a wonderful poem. I loved the rhyme and flow in it, it's superb. Beautifully written too. Your word choice is excellent. Your opening lines had me captivated straight away...
"I tried to reach out for the sun
But only touched the moon..."
I just had to read the rest!
I love poems that use pictures of nature in them... sun, moon , ocean etc. I enjoyed this piece emmensly... though it had a touch of sadness to it lol. A great write
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