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a garden of weeds


a garden of weeds
where well-soaked sailors gather
Davy Jones’ Locker


Author notes

Davy Jones' Locker is an idiom for the bottom of the sea; the resting place of drowned sailors.

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  • hezakiah
    November 21
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    Congratulations on the bronze!


  • azure85 gold member
    November 21
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    Blimey, but this is a good one! You have described the afterlife of the mortal ones who lived that life very well. Thank you so much for your pirate-ku.

  • quakietree
    November 9

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    Great Haiku!

    I love this.
    a garden of weeds
    where well-soaked sailors gather-
    I'm trying to imagine the sailors all drunk in a weeded area- maybe a cemetary??
    then Your Ah ha! moment!
    Davy Jones’ Locker-
    And I am picturing the clean. soaked bones among seaweed.
    And I like how you used a phrase and a fragment.
    Good luck in this contest.
    :-) qt


  • IrishGypsyRose silver member
    November 9

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    Garden of seaweed engulfing Davey Jones' locker. Like the image. Good write best of luck in the contest. ~gypsy~

  • hezakiah
    November 9
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    ooohhh...I can see their bones swaying.

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