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3am and lights dim


one can't describe
the initial instance of penetration-

like Armstrong
it's a buoyant feeling,
a stride
that invokes journey

yet it conveys
an epitome of emotion;

how could one possibly describe it
when delivery
is subject to opinion

and opinion,
is subject to technique;

but I do know

it's implicit in trust,
engineered
by the torque of thrust

and it's a moment
that should never ever

ever be rushed...

 

 

 

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  • Night Hope gold member
    November 27
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    Fortunately, I do smoke. And I am right now. "implicit in trust" - I like your attutude, Poet. You should bottle and sell that substance, ya know. Put all those nasty pharmaceutical companies right out of business. And your end line...YEAH.




  • Mango Memories gold member
    November 26
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    oh my ...!


  • Bella-lee
    November 20
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    well written.... I feel as though I need a smoke and I don't even smoke...


  • Camille Morin gold member
    November 17

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    I think it requires a unique and powerful talent to create something so erotic and sensual without being explicit. Your form is like stroking. I love this piece.

    Sincerely,
    Camille


  • WoodenShhoes
    November 14

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    I love this so much! and it made me giggle at the end


  • sheltered
    November 14
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    sweet

    this wholeheartedly won me over


  • ShaShay
    November 13

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    I agree with every word of this piece. Some things are just better when slow and more memorable as well. I remember the instant when this first time came with my true love. I can't explain it, but I remember. Kudos on a brilliant write.
    Sharon


  • tara wilson gold member
    November 12

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    This is such a beautiful and sexy write, a fast thrust and yet slow all at the same time, beautiful erotica, and a sensual whispered voice. love this.


  • Rend the Veil gold member
    November 10

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    sir i do believe I feel faint, fans self
    wow what a hot one, slow and percise
    the way it should be.. The Master hits once again

    love and blessings

    Rend


  • Desire gold member
    November 10

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    Dang~

    You say it like it is~ and I am like
    How You do that~

    It matters not what prompt~
    You take it to a whole new level...
    raise the bar high my Friend~
    Bravo! Mahvelous penning...

    Love the words:
    by the torque of trust...


    Keep that quill dancing
    Thank You for sharing Your Voice
    Best wishes in the contest~
    with love & light~ Desire~*~


  • Manda Kathryn Greeters member
    November 9

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    I'm intrigued ... deeply ... shall come back


  • Girl-Interrupted gold member
    November 9

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    bravo, kudos on an excellente' scribe! so sensual and i wholeheartedy agree, while rushing we tend to miss the best parts. ♥


  • JinSays gold member
    November 9

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    I wrote a poem called 3 am a few days ago, but mine was sad and miserable-this is quite the opposite. Please dont ever rush what is slow in development. I have to learn that myself. Glorious darling.
    love,
    jin


  • stef-witt gold member
    November 9

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    Ooooh!! Sexy!!

    I love the end... How it's not rushed

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