How dare you, pest!
you are a guest
you have no right
to be so rude and impolite.
I ask you to sit:
you peer and flit
with flickers of your kerchief
imaginary specks of phantom grit.
A drink to sip?
You curl your lip
and scrutinise minutely
for blemish, stain or chip.
A sandwich then?
Oh, not again!
you lift a corner of the bread
to check the regimen.
So now you've been to visit
and criticised my poem
Invite me [please, I dare you]
to step inside your home.
You'll find my manners fine and neat
With faultless etiquette
But my boots are black and muddy
and I forgive … but not forget.
A contest entry
- Complain!! by TerriMac.
875 points, ended November 22, 11 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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yes!
I cant stand rude people especially when they're in your own home!
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Oh heck.Who would want a guest like this!The poem made me smile and I liked the use of rhyme-short, concise and to the point.I think this added to the appeal.Montey
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Ohhh, take me with you. I'll help muddy the floors and leave a trail behind me they would not soon forget. 
How dare they criticize your poem. 
Good luck in the contest, my Friend. 
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Haha I like this poem! Very witty Mike. I like your word choices.
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Wow that's great, you really know how to get your point across. It's a great poem.
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OMG! What a flow and wits. Bravo, Mike. Hilarious too -
'But my boots are black and muddy
and I forgive … but not forget.'
All the best in the contest.
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Thanks - 'twas just a bit of fun ... I don't really mind criticism, no matter how fierce!
Mike -
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But I liked it on the first read.
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No ... I was referring to the poem re. criticism ... certainly not your great comment! Sorry if that was unclear.
Mike -
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Misunderstanding! There was none, Mike.
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