Ah, but languidly she releases
her gossamer chemise;
The straps slide off her alabaster limbs,
Silvery serpents,
Beckoning him
towards some impermissible tree.
What indiscretion might this Lilith
importune of him
through his unfortunate compulsion,
what bedevilment
would she wreak
not already accosted him
by his previous paramour?
All his puffery, linguistic marvels,
cascade away with her chemise,
and he shall be reduced to
single syllables,
single words,
and just
one
sound.
Author notes
"He has never been known to use a word that might send a reader to the dictionary." --William Faulkner (about Erniest Hemingway)
A contest entry
- Two Quote Prompt by GotLilt.
700 points, ended November 12, 5 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Wonderful!
The words are so delicious, like music. This is sensual and exquisitely written. Bravo!
Camille
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I love how this winds down to just one sound.
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Lita
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this piece
just drips right off the tongue when i read it out loud..so smooth sis, so clever, so damn awesomely good!! i shiny that shiny coming your way!
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Thank you, my dear. I certainly do have fun with some of those words! I'm glad it made you smile. Lita
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Oh, what wonderful words to languorously slide over the tongue! How I love
'all his puffery, linguistic marvels,
cascade away with her chemise'.
A beatiful winner, for sure!
And yes, I had to look up 'languorously' in the dictionary so I could spell it!
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When I was in the 4th grade and talked out of turn, the teacher as punishment would make me copy a page of the dictionary -- down to the slightest punctuation marks. Little did she know that I LOVED the dictionary, and spent half my punishment time finding and absorbing new words! Now that we have dictionaries on line, it is even easier to find amazing new words. I admit I haven't used "languorously" recently, LOL. Thank you for reading and for the clappies. Lita
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Well DAMN!!!! I admit I had to get my dictionary out to look up a few words in this one.
I love that though. "bedevilment"!!! For a minute I thought you had made that one up, but it was there in my dictionary. I love your tongue-in-cheek take on the prompt, your use of language, your subject, and especially your ending. It brought a smile to my face. Good luck in the contest...Alby
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Oh thank you, my friend! You got the whole point, of course, and smiled! I do have to be careful since English, Australian and American dictionaries often have different spellings and some words don't make it in all three! Thank you for reading this little "play on words"! Lita
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This is a sensual, serene and gorgeous response to the quotation, my Friend. Good luck in the contest, Sweetie. 
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Thank you so much! I enjoyed writing in this style, and trying to tell a little story, too. Lita
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Oh my this is just excellent. I found myself both open mouthed and smiling. This is totally priceless and clever! A fabulous write on the quote!
Best wishes in the contest, but I doubt you'll need it
Gaylene
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Thank you, Gaylene; I usually write in very straight-forward language, but I love long, elaborate words as well, since they convey another sort of feeling altogether. I'd hate to be restricted by either Faulkner or Hemingway! Lita
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What a good idea ... a kind of verbal strip-tease. I kind of enjoyed the visual of the gossamer chemise on the down-slide!
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Thank you for your comment! Sometimes you have to have a gimmick to keep attention on the subject! Lita
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