I want to be able to get through a day
a whole day
without feeling
like a loser or a failure
I can't stand it!
everyone acts like they're so perfect
I'm not perfect!
stop crucifying me already!
I want to be happy
but no one lets me
happiness only lasts for so long
I hate that!
my smiles fade away
so quickly nowadays
I want to be able to afford things
like getting married to my fiance
getting our own place
and having other children
besides my son
I want my dad to not have cancer
I want him at my wedding
to walk me down the aisle
to give me away
to my fiance
to my future husband
I want my problems to lessen
and for the world
to just give me and my family
a freakin' break!
Author notes
we all want what we cant have.
tell me what you want and cant have, and make it hurt.
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beautiful,well done. im not much good with words,but bravo
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awe.
I can relate to parts of this real well..
at the end of the day though, look at how you have it better than alot do.
at least your not out on the street. atleast you have one child...that sort of thing.
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i hope that means the piece touched you, made you cry, but you liked it?
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Hey; at least your not being tortured for answers; legless in some undeserving war country. I think your break is your life
Very emotionally unstable piece; but you spotted the prompt well.
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I so relate to this...it would seem that just when things seem to be working out...they fall away like the Berlin Wall. It sucks bad...sometimes, I find that when you stop to smell the roses, you are likely to encounter a few wicked thorns...Keep your chin up sweetie! I hate to see a friend down, but I know it is going around worse then that stupid HiNi virous...best wishes and godspeed.
~gypsy~
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i like the torturous feeling behind this. i know how this is and how bad it can get. i love the last line in the first stanza. very powerful!
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This made me cry. I don't cry easily either. That fourth stanza hits home and it hits hard. And how is everyone else so perfect and happy? I liked this though.
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